While I think it's weird that my ships were traveling just a few light-years away and didn't see anything in there, I'm willing to overlook it for the sake of plot. I'm glad you decided to put these guys on the actual main starmap.
This review is for: Danu Pocket
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=nebula:danu_pocket
Submission review applies to this page only
The submitted article is/has…
[ ] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ ] In the proper format/template -
Needs to use headers instead of bullet points for item headers
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar -
I did it for you this time
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link) -
Needs more links, perhaps mention some existing systems it is close to
[X] No red and/or broken links
[ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible -
Any explanation of how the pocket's barrier thing would work?
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X ] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[NA] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[NA] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[NA] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[NA] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note items above, in particular page layout/headers, and also map image needs to be moved to guide:map: (map: is not an authorized namespace). You will also need a sentence under the H2 section headers like "Regions."
Status: Pending