Approved Submission [Region/Sub Sector Submission] Danu Pocket

It's not a user, so don't put it in the user namespace, lol.

Edit: Move it to nebula, since that seemed to make the most sense. Moved overview to where it should be, under the title header.

Some of the sub-articles for the star systems contain red links.

Removed links to the star systems pending their own approvals down the road. Anything else?

While I think it's weird that my ships were traveling just a few light-years away and didn't see anything in there, I'm willing to overlook it for the sake of plot. I'm glad you decided to put these guys on the actual main starmap.

This review is for: Danu Pocket

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=nebula:danu_pocket

Submission review applies to this page only

The submitted article is/has…
[ ] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ ] In the proper format/template - Needs to use headers instead of bullet points for item headers
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar - I did it for you this time
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link) - Needs more links, perhaps mention some existing systems it is close to
[X] No red and/or broken links
[ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible - Any explanation of how the pocket's barrier thing would work?
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X ] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[NA] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[NA] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[NA] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[NA] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note items above, in particular page layout/headers, and also map image needs to be moved to guide:map: (map: is not an authorized namespace). You will also need a sentence under the H2 section headers like "Regions."

Status: Pending

Added a link to the UOC and the E-4 star system, until the sesestran systems go back through the approval process I'm not comfortable with linking them do to your prior complaint. The other complaints have also been adjusted.

[X] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[X] In the proper format/template
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X ] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

I made some adjustments to the headers to make it standard for our wiki. Clear for approval once the map image is moved to guide:map

Fixed.

Approved.