Approved Character Renate Anselm

[Tyler]

A new character for Scot's Abwher plot :3

 

[Abwehran Commander]

....Wow...what do I say about this.

I guess I'll start at the top. And the first problem I see here is her measurements. Now I realized that you wanted to opt out of it in our IRC conversation, but I never imagined you'd give her a 12 inch difference between waist and hips. It's kinda of extreme so I believe toning down on the hips or upping the waist is necessary...a ten inch difference would be more than satisfactory.

While that was the first thing I saw, the very first thing on your character page is her occupation. I know you like to call them Heavy Arms Specialists, but the correct term is Heavy Weapons Specialist.

A crystalline magatama....I honestly don't believe a magatama would work with an Abwehran. But I don't see why the shape can't evolve in the Abwehran culture either.

If she hates sleeping in cramped quarters, she's going to be annoyed with the shelf-style beds that Abwehran starships have. But you can keep it as a quirk, just wanted you to understand that the Abwehrans don't get single rooms like Yamatai unless they are a ship Captain or VIP.

The skills are actually well done, good job. But don't forget the standard issue gear for your character and Renate should have 9000 Credit starting funds with a salary of 600C weekly.

Other than these simple things, it's pretty good. I leave the rest to our esteemed Character Mods.

 

[Scot]

Commander refers to the instance when I was getting Vogel worked on. ^_^::

Only nitpick is that you have species as the planet's name, which honestly does look like the abridged version of their name.

 

[Gamerofthegame]

I guess I'll start at the top. And the first problem I see here is her measurements. Now I realized that you wanted to opt out of it in our IRC conversation, but I never imagined you'd give her a 12 inch difference between waist and hips. It's kinda of extreme so I believe toning down on the hips or upping the waist is necessary...a ten inch difference would be more than satisfactory.

...

God damnit, Tyler.

In anycase, don't you have to many characters? Wasn't this always your problem?

 

[Tyler]

For the measurements thing: Yeah I know. It is, it's something I can never get right so I usually leave it out, or copypasta from previous characters. I didn't mean to give offense though dude.

But can I get someone to format that inventory? I can't ever get it right for the life of me.

 

[Scot]

I fixed the inventory, though copy paste is as easy as clicking the edit button then copy.

As long as you don't delete anything mind you.

 

[Abwehran Commander]

Well, everything looks fine to me.

Character Mods, we await your approval.

 

[Doshii Jun]

This character is approved for IC usage.