Re: New Character: Otarcael "Lilly" Livia
I think that we've discussed other dimensional beings before, but I suggest that she just have a normal Nepleslian father... It makes her too special. Special = bad mojo in SA. We try to make the characters pretty similar to keep the fairness.
If you wish to attempt to write up on these other dimensional beings, however, please do so. You have to have at least six months of RPing experience on this site, though. The worst that we could do is deny the submission. Plus, I'd rather you submit the species first before making this character a half-breed so we know her capabilities, differences from normal humans, etc.
For the rest of the character:
1. Only 120 lbs, slim build, and
D-cups? Seriously? She'd have to be at least a C to pull that one off, truthfully. With her build, she -would- be anemic for a Nepleslian, but still.. the D-cups don't fit. Breasts are just basically fat deposits, so do you understand what I mean?
2. How is the 'rosiness' part of her skin? Is it artificial or natural? Explain either choice thoroughly please.
3. Remove 'very pretty' and 'stunning' from the "Facial Features and Eye Color" section. Let the roleplayers/GM decide if her face is pretty or her eyes are stunning or not.
4. Her hair length might get in the way of being a marine.
5. What triggers her cheerfulness if she's usually sad?
6. For family, please state the mother's name (we know she's a slave by the history), father's name (his species should be in the history, too), and whoever (among the slavers/slaves) actually took care of her. Remember, there are absolutely no mysteries when it comes to character bios on SARP.
7. What does the surname mean?
8. You need one more skill. Please review
this wiki article, as you are missing some required skills as well.
9. Physical: She should've also been trained in use of weapons/hand-to-hand combat/grenades from the Nep bootcamp.
10. The "Inventory" header is posted twice.
Overall: I can barely call this character decent. You have a lot of issues, but your large vocabulary is a plus. The above issues need to be addressed, and the father's species must be clarified upon. I can see your potential, so don't give up.
Character approval denied until these 'other dimensional beings' are submitted and approved for IC usage.