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[Shara Industries] Agricultural Dehumidifier

SSharp

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Submission Type: Water Supply
Submission URL: Here

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FM Approved Yet? Yes.

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Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Previously Submitted? No

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What it says on the tin. Shara has frequent problems with water supply, and this submission serves the dual purpose of providing struggling communities on the homeworld with water, and new settlements with a steady, clean water supply for crops etc..
 
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The Agricultural Dehumidifier was a rehash of older designs in YE 34 created by Shara Industries.
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The opening sentence should always say what the item is. Does this item extract moisture from the air?

Alone, it's use is restricted to providing a minimal water supply to small communities
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Please, please stop using "it's" in articles. See: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=guide:its
 
Ugh. I gave that speech to a friend of mine not five minutes before writing up the article. Embarrassing to be caught with a mistake. And yes, that's its stated purpose, down, below -- I didn't include it in the title sentence, but I can if needed.

Edit: Fixed on both counts.
 
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