Arieg
DEFCON Everybody Dies
A standoff cruise missile meant to be operated beyond a light minute.
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=pa ... se_missile
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SS-ASM-3 'Shipwreck' Anti-Ship Missile
- Thread starter Arieg
- Start date
This review is for: SS-ASM-3 'Shipwreck' Anti-Ship Missile
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[-] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[-] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[-] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[-] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
Status: Pending
Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.
Overpowered - Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
This submission wants to do 4 SDR4, if approved it would set a precedent for bigger and even more unrealistic damage.
Reasonably scientifically plausible
The use of Nuclear Pulse Propulsion for a missile is not feasible, nor practical. Plus there is no way to 'steer' the missile with this kind of propulsion. Further setting off an Anti-Matter explosion to push the missile, is probably going to destroy it, and even if it did not, that kind of an energy pulse is going to set off a ship's warning with plenty of time to blow it out of the sky.
Lacking Detail
The Two antimatter catalyzed thermonuclear pulse detonation drives is just a single line with no explanation of how it works.
No details provided as to what the MIRV propulsion system is.
No power system is listed,
Has a Distortion shield projection system., but do not provide information as to what protection it offers.
space time ghosts? So you are trying to have this create a strong enough gravity to warp space time
I intend to finish this review by: (WRITE IN DATE)
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[-] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[-] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[-] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[-] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
Status: Pending
Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.
Overpowered - Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
This submission wants to do 4 SDR4, if approved it would set a precedent for bigger and even more unrealistic damage.
Reasonably scientifically plausible
The use of Nuclear Pulse Propulsion for a missile is not feasible, nor practical. Plus there is no way to 'steer' the missile with this kind of propulsion. Further setting off an Anti-Matter explosion to push the missile, is probably going to destroy it, and even if it did not, that kind of an energy pulse is going to set off a ship's warning with plenty of time to blow it out of the sky.
Lacking Detail
The Two antimatter catalyzed thermonuclear pulse detonation drives is just a single line with no explanation of how it works.
No details provided as to what the MIRV propulsion system is.
No power system is listed,
Has a Distortion shield projection system., but do not provide information as to what protection it offers.
space time ghosts? So you are trying to have this create a strong enough gravity to warp space time
I intend to finish this review by: (WRITE IN DATE)
Arieg
DEFCON Everybody Dies
'Shipwreck' is the generic easily remembered name NATO intelligence selected for the Soviet P-700 Granit anti-ship cruise missile, so in no way is this an infringement on the former Soviet Navy. Please go troll somewhere else Fiver.
In other news, stats adjusted, added requested items and numbers.
In other news, stats adjusted, added requested items and numbers.
Please make one last addition as indicated, you did not put the class of the SP, and that is too much SP for a missile. 20 is star fighter sized
should probably more like 10 and the physical should be .8 of the class in the case you have 16 not 20.
■ Distortion shield projection system. (SP 20(4)) (Armor)
■ Lightweight Durandium Alloy shell. (SP 20) (Armor)
should probably more like 10 and the physical should be .8 of the class in the case you have 16 not 20.
■ Distortion shield projection system. (SP 20(4)) (Armor)
■ Lightweight Durandium Alloy shell. (SP 20) (Armor)
Abwehran Commander
Inactive Member
The 0.375 c rule is mostly for starships.
I've seen plenty of ordnance go above that.
I've seen plenty of ordnance go above that.
