Approved Submission [SUBMISSION SANTA] New product from Kagayaki Cosmetics

[Damaske]

Submission URL

https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:kagayaki_cosmetics:products:perfumes:lavandulastardust

Submission Faction(s)

1. Yamatai (except Elysia)

Submission Terms

1. I agree

Doing something for a Secret Santa plot thread, but also felt it would be nice to open it up for everyone.

I do hope that this is acceptable for the theme of the Secret Santa thread, as it was saying something more personal.

 

[Andrew]

I will take a look at this. Reviewer Assigned.

 

[Andrew]

Everything looks good except the history section.

The history section should be written in a historical context referencing dates. So my recommendation would be something like this:

The Lavandula Stardust body spray was developed by [[corp:kagayaki_cosmetics]] in [[timeline:ye_45|YE 45.7]] and was made available to all the markets the company served in the [[maps:kikyo_sector]]. The bodyspray was featured in several ads in fashion magazines and other media as part of the brand's main product line, with plans to continue its promotion for years. The product is known to be enjoyed by [[characters:independent:nikicon_swiftfoot]] who serves on the [[starships:iss_sobek]].

The reference to the "Secret Santa" thread should be added to the OOC Information such as:

This product was created for the Secret Santa event((Submission Secret Santa)).

Once these two little things are fixed, this submission will be ready for approval.

 

[Damaske]

Ok, I have made the adjustments as needed and added the OOC sections.

 

[Andrew]

Approved.

 

[Andrew]

Please fill out the struct. I fixed the wikification for you in the history.

 

[Wes]

Added a price to struct. Remember, if there's no price on struct, your product doesn't appear on the list of products. This is obviously bad for sales...