Approved Submission System Cascade and Cascade Prime

This review is for: Cascade
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The submitted article is/has…
[ Yes ] A very high level of overall quality
[ Yes ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ N/A ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ ??? ] Needed and/or useful to the setting

• What's this gonna be used for in the future? I'm assuming as an Akemi's production system or something seeing as Tengoku station is close by.

[ Yes ] In the proper format/template
[ Yes ] Proofread for spelling and grammar

• I hate to be the guy.

• I'm gonna be that guy.
  • Last sentence before OOC notes is missing a period.
  • Also the footnote should be "besides flora and fauna." Something something, prepositions are really annoying.

[ Yes ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ 1 LEFT ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)

• Cascade Prime should be linked to the Cascade Prime subsection.

[ Yes ] No red and/or broken links
[ Yes ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ Yes ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ No ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ No ] Obtusely redundant
[ No ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ No ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ Ni ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ Nu] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ekki-ekki-ekki-pitang-zoom-boing ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ No ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ No ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ No ] Lacking Detail
[ No ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ N/A ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ N/A ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ N/A ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ N/A ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Just the purpose of the system itself (mostly because of MBL reasons).

Status: Approved

Notes
None.

I intend to finish this review by: 5/30/2018

This review is for: Cascade Prime

The submitted article is/has…
[ Yes ] A very high level of overall quality
[ Yes ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ N/A ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\

• Planet art is appreciated, though.

[ ??? ] Needed and/or useful to the setting

• Okay it's definitely an Akemi's farm world.

[ Yes ] In the proper format/template
[ Yes ] Proofread for spelling and grammar

• "Gaia Planet" is a nonexistent term. (Location: More about Cascade Prime)
• "It teems with life" is redundant.

[ Yes ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ Yes ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ Yes ] No red and/or broken links
[ Yes ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ Yes ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ No ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ No ] Obtusely redundant
[ No ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ No ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ Ni ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ Nu] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ekki-ekki-ekki-pitang-zoom-boing ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ No ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ No ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ No ] Lacking Detail
[ No ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ N/A ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ N/A ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ N/A ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ N/A ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
No issues.

Status: Approved

Notes
None.

I intend to finish this review by: 5/30/2018

Changes made.

This will be a place for a small scale battle for my character Aashi Nath, her hubbo, and various others to fight in. They currently reside in Ulyshi, which is up there in the North North.

That'll be fun. Everything is fixed...

*double approve*

*hits that create pad button and summons Gunhand*