This submission is rejected.
- Too complex
- Explanations in the article didn't match those in this thread
- Didn't seem to offer benefits to the setting IMO
Still evaluating this.[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
YE 22 and other terms need linkage.[ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
Self-explanatory[ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
Looking at the "upper echelons" and such. Also wondering how this is better than Yamataian aether systems like it claims. I don't see it.[?] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
Deciding on the history factor.[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
B.Y.-22 (Before-Yamatai 22, like B.C./Before Christ).YE 22 and other terms need linkage.
Looking at the "upper echelons" and such. Also wondering how this is better than Yamataian aether systems like it claims. I don't see it.
This doesn't really jive with the way aether works in the setting. I suggest the line be removed.If the power of the pulse or beat is strong enough, the device can reduce the amount of aether going to other devices of a lesser pull - though this only effective against smaller weaker devices like those seen in small fighters and armors.
This and the preceding sentence need clarification. Also, the random line breaks should be removed if possible.Because
the charge is lower, however, the fire-detection warning typically comes a little later.
Not feeling too warm toward this area, mainly the "Aetheric" part. Would regular fallout be okay?Bosons discharge gradually when released into an environment - their charge lost to photons resulting in a gradual release of gamma-radiation and a slow scalar-aether-like decay, lasting 30 days: Aetheric Fallout.
You said a tab strong enough can reduce what's going to other taps.This doesn't really jive with the way aether works in the setting. I suggest the line be removed.
Alright.This and the preceding sentence need clarification. Also, the random line breaks should be removed if possible.
Lilly said:If it's approved, as a theory and technology, how long is it until there are new warships, designs, and weapons that have SDR 5 level.
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