BloodyScarlet
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character: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:lilith_oakheart
plot GM: @Semjax
plot GM: @Semjax
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Approved Character [The Black Viper] Lilith Oakheart
- Thread starter BloodyScarlet
- Start date
Alrighty, Most of it looks good but there are a few things I want you to do.
Considering she's a genetic creation I'm thinking I'd like a little bit more description on how she physically looks in the Body section.
Secondly she doesn't know any other languages? If she does you'll need to list what languages she does know under communication.
I think those are the only 'gripes' I have honestly, fix those and we'll see what @Wes @Kyle @Nashoba or @Aendri have to say, and if they're good for it you're good for the plot.
(Oh and its Semjax ;P)
Considering she's a genetic creation I'm thinking I'd like a little bit more description on how she physically looks in the Body section.
Secondly she doesn't know any other languages? If she does you'll need to list what languages she does know under communication.
I think those are the only 'gripes' I have honestly, fix those and we'll see what @Wes @Kyle @Nashoba or @Aendri have to say, and if they're good for it you're good for the plot.
(Oh and its Semjax ;P)
Centurion0507
Inactive Member
I personally am going to raise the question of how did she acquire military hardware from the Gartagen union?
BloodyScarlet
Well-Known Member
Ah I actually forgot to change that, I was making a Gartagen first sorry, and I did say she spoke trade, but that is it.
BloodyScarlet
Well-Known Member
I believe I have changed to what I need it to be, I made sure that Trade was more visible in communication, I added to what she looks likes, and I changed her weapons to Yamataian, as her mother was Yamataian in the history.
