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The Libertarian Republic of Drift

zephyrite

zephyrite

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Here ya go, tell me what you think!

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=the_libertarian_republic_of_drift

I have yet to map out the decks, but that isn't necessary to the function of the station.

This has been RP'ed from concept to completion IC, and all it needs now is some good old criticism. Tell me what I've screwed up on within the article, as this is the first piece of BIG technology I've submitted.

Thank you in advance,
Zephyrite
 
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zephyrite said:
This has been RP'ed from concept to completion IC
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You mean this: Drifting Into Place? Just wondering, since it's kind of short.

Anyway, I'm checking this out because it involves Freespacers and they're my responsibility now. My main question is this: did you speak with any of the previous Freespacer GMs when this was in development? Roleplay with them isn't necessarily required, but an OOC agreement should have been reached at an earlier point. Jess was still around when you started this, so there's no reason you couldn't have received her OK. If you never bothered to tell the people who were previously in control of the Freespacers, we will have to speak in further detail about their involvement.

That said, nothing looks outrageously objectionable about the technology of Drift to me. I'll let the tech people take care of that. The story elements may need to be ironed out though.
 
If Jess roleplayed it, then it is acceptable whether I agree or not. Thumbs-up from the Freespacer FM.
 
I do have a quick question however. I completely forgot about this little part from within that RP.
"I shall also take the liberty to add some 1800mm artillery turrets, point defense quadcannons, and shield emitters to act as a deterrence against any pirate raids or any other interference. Automated Phantasm gunships will also be provided for local patrol and escort duty."
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Since you are the Freespacer FM, I was wondering what would be the standard number of these things for a station of this size, and also the strength of the shield, so I can add them to the wiki page.
 
For the 1800mm artillery and point defense, I don't think you really need to state exactly how many are there; it doesn't really matter how many guns it has during roleplay. I don't know what kind of shield emitters that Jess was talking about, but Freespacer shielding is probably "Standard" or "Advanced." While they have the capability, I'm sure, for "Very Advanced" shielding, it'd be an incredibly rare thing.

The 275m Divine Comedy houses 40 Phantasm Gunships and realistically could hold far more than that, so I'm sure that a structure as massive as a Freespacer mothership could hold a comparably massive amount of gunships--at least several squadrons. From the sound of the post, they were providing enough to act as defense patrols, so somewhere in the ballpark of 100-400, but I wouldn't think anywhere above that and somewhere closer to the bottom of that spectrum. Not many Phantasms are needed to cover a large area as patrol. Think of them as similar to fighter jets.
 
It makes sense. Drift is a huge structure and could probably house far more than that, but the post seemed to me that the gunships were provided to be less of a force that could stand up and all out defend the place from invasion and more like a deterrence against raiders. I'm sure Galar will end up adding a lot more defense personnel and equipment anyway.
 
This review is for: The Libertarian Republic of Drift

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[-] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[-] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[-] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[-] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[-] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


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  • Artwork - need some sort of image to give an idea of what it looks like
  • Proofread for spelling and grammar
  • Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
  • No red and/or broken links - Grinder is a red link
  • Reasonably scientifically plausible
  • The in-character year of creation missing
  • Lacking Detail

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Following spelling and grammar errors
Libertarain mispelled under culture

either pilot powered armor. command Militia should be a comma after armor

Philosipher misspelled under power source

Wikified, document needs to be seriously wikified you make references to all sorts of things, but do not link to them.

Lacking Detail

Need to specify how many 1800mm Artillery and quadcannon point defenses are installed.

The EVS contains the sensor functions. What is the EVS? and what capbilities does it provide.

You have shields identified, but the damage rating section doesn't reflect their presence.
 
Alright, I think I got most of the things you pointed out, but I am quite confused about shields. How much shielding should it have and how should I list it on the wiki?
 
Shielding is usually listed under the hull like this example from the Plumeria

Hull: 20
Shields: 20 (Threshold 2)

As for how much, it depends on the level of shields

You have the hull as 65

From the Damage Rating page

Standard 0.6 x Base Structural Points
Advanced 0.8 x Base Structural Points
Very Advanced 1.0 x Base Structural Points

Using the Phatasm as a baseline it says Shield Rating: Standard Shielding

So your shield would be 65 * .6 or 39 threshold would be probably 5
 
I added a bunch of wiki links. But you have one big issue still.

Under Weapons you have to systems listed, that are not linked and I can not find a page with such items. You either have to either replace them with an approved system, or write them up in the article including damage, rof etc.

80 1800mm Artillery and 1000 quadcannon point defenses.
 
Good point. I remember getting them from either Jess or Raz, but at this point, it's been so long I can't remember who told me to use them. I updated the point defenses, and am just using a comparable weapon to what was suggested. I think the Pseudoflare cannons will work nicely.

Anything else?
 
The freespacer weapons article you linked to needs major updating, Zephyrite.

Try and get Raz to fix those, seeing as he is the current 'Spacer FM.
 
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