This review is for: The Libertarian Republic of Drift
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[-] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[-] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[-] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[-] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[-] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
- Artwork - need some sort of image to give an idea of what it looks like
- Proofread for spelling and grammar
- Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
- No red and/or broken links - Grinder is a red link
- Reasonably scientifically plausible
- The in-character year of creation missing
- Lacking Detail
Status: , Pending
Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.
Following spelling and grammar errors
Libertarain
mispelled under culture
either pilot powered armor. command Militia
should be a comma after armor
Philosipher misspelled under power source
Wikified, document needs to be seriously wikified you make references to all sorts of things, but do not link to them.
Lacking Detail
Need to specify how many 1800mm Artillery and quadcannon point defenses are installed.
The EVS contains the sensor functions. What is the EVS? and what capbilities does it provide.
You have shields identified, but the damage rating section doesn't reflect their presence.