Okay looked over your sheet and there are a few things that are of concern that are gonna need some sorting out in order to get everything working.
Race
There are some problems with your choice of race that we need to address.
- First the race itself; it would be a better choice to use a race that's already established or a culture. In SARP races have to go through the NTSE to get approval to make sure the race is balanced and appropriate for the setting. There are 3 main paths you can take if you want to make an Anthro Cougar using established races.
- Minkan: This is a race from the Yamatai Star Empire, while they can be born naturally, they also can have bodies made for them in growing vats, and with Yamatai tech can move their minds to new bodies. The body could be designed to look like an anthro cougar but still retain minkan capabilities.
- Nepleslian: While the primary race for this culture is 'human' they allow any race in pretty much so there are lots of different undescribed races in their territory.
- Hidden Sun Clan Races: This is another culture that has 2 primary and 2 'mixed' races that are all anthro cat races. If you want to be an anthro cat but it doesn't persay have to be exactly a cougar this is probably the way you want to go, however it will require some research and talking with the Faction manager to work out getting the character out of clan territory and into the rest of space.
- If you do choose to try using your race, a lot more description about them will be required. Why is this race able ot live so long? Why has no one seen them, why is Valumn out side his race's contorted space? It would need to be much more than a simple paragraph.
- Which ever option you take however some things need to be considered, things further something is away from a base human the more likely it needs to be run by the NTSE first. Even if it seems 'mundane'
Physical Description
Physical description needs to be improved. The general policy is to put enough into physical description that if an artist was given your character sheet they could draw your character fairly close to what you're picturing in your head, without any real input from the player.
Psychological Characteristics and History
Psychological Characteristics needs a goal, and history just needs plainly to be elaborated. After reading a character's sheet there shouldn't be any questions about how they got to where they are now. It shoudl also explain how they got the skills that the player chooses to give to the character.
Skills
- Communication: Skills are not the place to talk about technology that the character has on him. It should list his own body's capabilities and only that. This skill needs to list his proficiency level in languages and other forms of communication such as hand signals and radio use and documentation.
- All: Just in general they need a little more elaboration on his capabilities in things as they are they're kind of vague or limited.
Inventory
Your character's inventory should be filled out. Your character starts with the value equivalent to 3000KS if they're independent and you can purchase good to start with within that value. Some items are limited though to who can buy them or have different prices for those who aren't citizens of their nation.
There will be more most likley after the sheet is changed to reflect this, but let's handle these first.