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Approved Character Tio, first character

Lex_Sandar

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Name: Inoue Tio


General Information

Species: Nekovalkyjra NH-29
Gender: Self replicating Female
Age: 2 months

Family / Creators: Star Army of Yamatai

Employer: Star Army of Yamatai
Occupation: Combat Arms
Rank: Santo Hei
Current Assignment: Seeking one


Physical Characteristics

Height: 5'
Weight: 95 lb
Measurements:
Bra Size: C

Build and Skin Colour: Tio has quite pale white skin, and a slim build. A bit shorter than average for a Nekovalkyjra, she's still far stronger than she looks, like most of her kind. Despite her constant physical training she's maintained a rather significant bust, for an athletic Neko, anyhow.
Facial Features and Eye Colour: Tio has a pale face with a somewhat delicate look to it. She rarely smiles, and when she does it is usually rather small. She has generally oriental features. Her yellow eyes are rarely looking one place for long, unless she's asking a question.
Hair Colour and Style: Tio wears her blue hair in a rather short page boy cut to keep it out of the way in battle.

Distinguishing Features: Tio has a genetic tattoo imprinted on her left lower back imprinted with their manufacturer information and serial number.


Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Tio is rather quiet and quick to obey orders, though very inquisitive. If she doesn’t understand the reason behind an order or the order itself she is quick to ask for clarification. She has rather limited experience with others, and tends to be rather polite and formal. She is very determined to serve and fulfill her duty to the Star Army of Yamatai for her creation, and to find a larger purpose in her life. She does not consider herself particularly important, when compared to others, but will be quick to offer aid to another…so long as it does not prevent her from completing her orders. She will not disobey any lawfully given order, though if she considers such a truly poor choice she may ask for clarification in an attempt to get her commander to choose a better course.

Likes: Powered Armor, Training, Learning, the Thrill of Battle, Order, Trying new things, Loyalty
Dislikes: Those who disobey orders, Chaos, Fools, Cowards, Lazy people
Goals: Find a purpose beyond serving the Star Army of Yamatai. Serve well and fulfill her duty.


History

Tio has a rather short history at this time. She has only recently been created for the purpose of serving in the Star Army of Yamatai. She has been trained after creation in the basics of her role as a powered armor pilot. She still has rather limited experience dealing with other people, though she is quite curious about such. Being only a few months old, her future and past are both ahead, not behind.


Skills

Communication:: Tio is familiar with basic radio operation and procedures and can make transmissions to and receive transmissions from other characters through headsets, starships, power armor, and shuttles in both combat and non-combat conditions. She is fluent in English, and Japanese. She can speak and write both correctly and efficiently and can write reports, fill forms, issue orders under fire, etc. Being Nekovalkyjra she is also trained in her native telepathy.

Fighting & Fighting (Power Armor): : Tio received hand-to-hand combat training, followed up with a rigorous training program. She is skilled and experienced in combat both in Yamatai-like conditions and in zero-gravity, with and without weapons. Weapons she is trained in include energy pistols, knives, and power armor, rifles and grenades. Tio received much more training in piloting power armors than most other Star Army soldiers. She knows the ins and outs of a power armor system and is able to diagnose and solve minor to moderate system problems (electronic malfunctions, intake problems), and can perform rudimentary repairs (very basic) with proper tools. She can operate hand-controlled flight systems.

Technology Operation: : Tio is capable of operating any computer system that uses the Kessaku OS, found on all Star Army starships. She is proficient in entering and/or searching for information.

Mathematics:: Tio received basic mathematics training, to including up to algebra and trigonometry. She has studied little beyond that, despite her curiousity, finding pure numbers boring without a specific use for them.

Physical:: A trained Neko soldier, Tio was created already a skilled athlete, with significant strength and catlike agility. Her training for Combat Arms has only improved on that. She is skilled at swimming, diving, tumbling, climbing and most athletic activities.

Survival and Military: : Tio has received basic instruction in surivial techniques through her military training and the knowledge she was created with. She has done little to extend such knowledge though.

Maintenance and Repair: : Tio has been studying to improve on her technical skills related to the care and repair of powered armor, in hopes of proving more useful outside of combat. She hopes in time to become a fully trained Powered Armor technician.


OOC Notes

This is my first character created for Star Army of Yamatai. Any advice or correction on mistakes would be more than welcome.

Edited to fix mistakes, etc. Now includes all info from below and corrections noted so far.
 
I honestly see nothing wrong with this bio on the first reading, other than the physical description sections. You should probably exchange the ellipses for commas.

Other than that, excellent work.
 
Alright, I'll switch the ellipses to commas, if you like. A couple questions, other than that. What actual rank should she be? I'm figuring low, inexperienced enlisted.

Other than that, I need to make a wiki page and post a request for orders, correct?
 
Rank would be Santo Hei, which is the lowest rank. Other than that, yes, you need to wiki the bio. However, she's not approved yet. You'll need to wait for Doshii Jun or Kim to do that.

Also, while I'm not sure if it's absolutely necessary for Nekovalkyrja, you should probably invest in a last name.
 
Updated Bio

Name: Inoue Tio


General Information

Species: Nekovalkyjra NH-29
Gender: Self replicating Female
Age: 2 months

Family / Creators: Star Army of Yamatai

Employer: Star Army of Yamatai
Occupation: Combat Arms
Rank: Santo Hei
Current Assignment: Seeking one


Physical Characteristics

Height: 5'
Weight: 95 lb
Measurements:
Bra Size: C

Build and Skin Colour: Tio has quite pale white skin, and a slim build. A bit shorter than average for a Nekovalkyjra, she's still far stronger than she looks, like most of her kind. Despite her constant physical training she's maintained a rather significant bust, for an athletic Neko, anyhow.
Facial Features and Eye Colour: Tio has a pale face with a somewhat delicate look to it. She rarely smiles, and when she does it is usually rather small. She has generally oriental features. Her yellow eyes are rarely looking one place for long, unless she's asking a question.
Hair Colour and Style: Tio wears her blue hair in a rather short page boy cut to keep it out of the way in battle.

Distinguishing Features: Tio has a genetic tattoo imprinted on her left lower back imprinted with their manufacturer information and serial number.


Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Tio is rather quiet and quick to obey orders, though very inquisitive. If she doesn’t understand the reason behind an order or the order itself she is quick to ask for clarification. She has rather limited experience with others, and tends to be rather polite and formal. She is very determined to serve and fulfill her duty to the Star Army of Yamatai for her creation, and to find a larger purpose in her life. She does not consider herself particularly important, when compared to others, but will be quick to offer aid to another…so long as it does not prevent her from completing her orders. She will not disobey any lawfully given order, though if she considers such a truly poor choice she may ask for clarification in an attempt to get her commander to choose a better course.

Likes: Powered Armor, Training, Learning, the Thrill of Battle, Order, Trying new things, Loyalty
Dislikes: Those who disobey orders, Chaos, Fools, Cowards, Lazy people
Goals: Find a purpose beyond serving the Star Army of Yamatai. Serve well and fulfill her duty.


History

Tio has a rather short history at this time. She has only recently been created for the purpose of serving in the Star Army of Yamatai. She has been trained after creation in the basics of her role as a powered armor pilot. She still has rather limited experience dealing with other people, though she is quite curious about such. Being only a few months old, her future and past are both ahead, not behind.


Skills

Communication:: Tio is familiar with basic radio operation and procedures and can make transmissions to and receive transmissions from other characters through headsets, starships, power armor, and shuttles in both combat and non-combat conditions. She is fluent in English, and Japanese. She can speak and write both correctly and efficiently and can write reports, fill forms, issue orders under fire, etc. Being Nekovalkyjra she is also trained in her native telepathy.

Fighting & Fighting (Power Armor): : Tio received hand-to-hand combat training, followed up with a rigorous training program. She is skilled and experienced in combat both in Yamatai-like conditions and in zero-gravity, with and without weapons. Weapons she is trained in include energy pistols, knives, and power armor, rifles and grenades. Tio received much more training in piloting power armors than most other Star Army soldiers. She knows the ins and outs of a power armor system and is able to diagnose and solve minor to moderate system problems (electronic malfunctions, intake problems), and can perform rudimentary repairs (very basic) with proper tools. She can operate hand-controlled flight systems.

Technology Operation: : Tio is capable of operating any computer system that uses the Kessaku OS, found on all Star Army starships. She is proficient in entering and/or searching for information.

Mathematics:: Tio received basic mathematics training, to including up to algebra and trigonometry. She has studied little beyond that, despite her curiousity, finding pure numbers boring without a specific use for them.

Physical:: A trained Neko soldier, Tio was created already a skilled athlete, with significant strength and catlike agility. Her training for Combat Arms has only improved on that. She is skilled at swimming, diving, tumbling, climbing and most athletic activities.

Survival and Military: : Tio has received basic instruction in surivial techniques through her military training and the knowledge she was created with. She has done little to extend such knowledge though.

Maintenance and Repair: : Tio has been studying to improve on her technical skills related to the care and repair of powered armor, in hopes of proving more useful outside of combat. She hopes in time to become a fully trained Powered Armor technician.
 
I too, reccommend this for approval, it's a great Bio, much better than my first one, that's for sure.
 
That is a very good bio. But since I don't have the authority nor experience to do anything... I'll just give you the compliment
 
I was away yesterday at the Cal-Wazzu football game. I will get to this sometime today.
 
One little nit-picky thing... In the Communications skill:

Your character is fluent in English, and Japanese.

Please fix that. By the way, you can edit your original post instead of posting a new one.
 
Okay, character approved.

*grabs Kim's stamp*

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