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Approved Character Tokiko Hyuuga Approved or not?

Kuroneko

Inactive Member
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http://i97.photobucket.com/albums/l226/elliavalon/dc096e91.jpg (IMAGE FOR GENERAL REFERENCE ONLY)
Species:Yamataian
Gender:Female
Age:22
Zodiac Sign: Scorpio
Family:N/A
Occupation:Pirate
Employer
:Self-employed

Measurements
Height:5"5'
Weight:120
Bra Size:36A
Measurements:(working on it)

Tokiko has an average build and is on the petite side. She has white hair tied with a yellow band and has golden colored eyes. What distinguishes her is the hair clip she wears.

Personality
Her personality is serious and she tends not to be the kind of person to joke around too much unless it's around her closest of friends. Tokiko has a slighty cold attitude and seems to be introverted, but cares for her friends more than people think. She comes off as such and drives away people, but once you get to know her she isn't like that. She can also be rebellious if there is something that she thinks is corrupt or stupid, but can negotiate.

Her views on politics tend to be apathetic, unless they would have a big impact on her. She sees humans as just another race like the Elysians and she's only involved because she wants to be. She's only known for her slight anti-authority, but other than that she doesn't have much of s reputation.

Likes:Reading, Music, Chocolate, the colors:black and blue, guns, sarcasm
Dislikes:Control freaks, people who are close minded, people who are racist

History:
She grew up in a mostly normal environment in an upper-middle class family and seemed to obey her parents until she was in high school. There she disobeyed all adults because she had the mindset that all adults were corrupt after her teacher made her apologize in front of the school even though she was proven innocent for a crime and so she punched her teacher. She was like that until her only friend became an adult and knocked some sense into Tokiko. She became a pirate using her parents' trust fund and her crew is composed of close friends(including her adult friend), people she has met on the way, and past pirates. She learned most of her pirating skills through older crew members.

Skills

Communication: Tokiko is fluent in both English and Japanese in terms of both speaking and writing. She knows only some Spanish she picked up from her travels. She knows both English and Japanese from school.
Rouge:She can pick locks, Pick-pocket if she needs to, and is somewhat "streetwise". Tokiko aquired(sp) these skills on her first year of being a pirate when she and one of the other shipmates were in port, but separated from the ship and short on money. She was taught to be "streetwise"
Survival and Military:She can find water and navigate moderately as well as hunting. She spent some time learning this during her teenage years when she was camping in one of the summers.
Fighting: Living as a pirate she learned to fight with a cutlass and in hand-to-hand combat. She has taken a few self-defense classes and can use a gun. Her marksmenship was taught by her uncle who used to serve in the army. Her swordsmanship came being in a sword fighting class she took since she was little. Tokiko learned to fight from instinct and added on that with her self-defense classes, so her style would mostly be a hodgepodge of different things.

OOC: I think this all of it and again constructive criticism is always welcome. I'll add more if I forget anything.
 
What you've got so far looks good. The only big suggestion I could make is adding some more to the visual description, since 'tied in a yellow band' is kinda vague to picture... but, then, you've got an illustration. It balances out.

Also, 135 lbs. is a closer to average weight than petite, especially since Yamataians in general seem to be pretty thin in general. It's a perfectly believable weight, but something around 110-125 pounds might reinforce the slim thing. I'm nit-picky, I know.

Don't worry too much about Measurements entry, though, if nothing pops to mind. It seems to be kinda an optional thing, since the numbers are a lot harder to visualize than a good description.
 
The skills need some work here. How were the skills acquired? Just needs more detail. Not approved. Needs some more work.
 
Character sounds like someone who's not really adept at fighting, but rather knows how to be rather scrappy and rugged.
 
I haven't. Help me out here -- the fighting "style" basically sounds like a mish-mash. A dedicated soldier might wipe this person off the floor or might get his ass kicked; I can't tell. Melee weapons are rarely seen around here.
 
It's a little like capoeira and a mixture of different styles of fighting, taking like the best points of it and combining it. So yeah it sorta is a mishmash of her own style. I can see how wouldn't be able to tell though since it could go either way. The reason she does this because she wants to see what style an opponent uses and counters it and because she isn't completely advanced in one style.
 
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