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Approved Character Toyotomi Natsumi
- Thread starter Sekoriah
- Start date
Andrew
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Non-traditional starting Rank level approved by Faction Manager. I think the profile looks great, but I helped her with it so I will step back and let the system do its work.
Andrew
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There is no rule that I know that requires me to have a ship full of enlisted.
The UOC doesn't have the playerbase for me to pull vetern players for officers. So I have to fill roles, and ranks as I see fit. If it becomes an issue. I will merely did as I did in the 5th XF and start her out at the bottom and push her up to where I need the coverage, which in this case is Operations Officer.
In addition to this the rank level I gave her is reasonable. She is a Sub-Lt. Which in the UOC is fresh out of the Academy. Essentially her first tour of duty not as a cadet.
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=un ... transition
The UOC doesn't have the playerbase for me to pull vetern players for officers. So I have to fill roles, and ranks as I see fit. If it becomes an issue. I will merely did as I did in the 5th XF and start her out at the bottom and push her up to where I need the coverage, which in this case is Operations Officer.
In addition to this the rank level I gave her is reasonable. She is a Sub-Lt. Which in the UOC is fresh out of the Academy. Essentially her first tour of duty not as a cadet.
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=un ... transition
Site policy is New players start at the bottom of the ranks. This rule has been in force since before I joined last year.
In most cases, a character rank does not control what position the character can hold. So even as a Peacekeeper Recruit you could put her in whatever ship position.
As for the character itself:
Description is lacking details, for example, how long is her hair? how does she wear it?
Skin pale? Pale what? Pale Pink, Blue, etc
Facial and eye Asian-look with Green, Asian-look? Lumping all Asian people into one look, seriously?
In most cases, a character rank does not control what position the character can hold. So even as a Peacekeeper Recruit you could put her in whatever ship position.
As for the character itself:
Description is lacking details, for example, how long is her hair? how does she wear it?
Skin pale? Pale what? Pale Pink, Blue, etc
Facial and eye Asian-look with Green, Asian-look? Lumping all Asian people into one look, seriously?
Dragonnova
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I think the oriental slant in our eyes is what she's going for, but that's just me.
Okay,
Here are still some issues.
Hair Color and Style: Blue, Typically straight. (Still no description of its length. I presume that she just lets it hang free.)
History
Created on Taiie in early YE 29. - So is she a cloned soldier or a person if she was made for the 5th XF then she most likely was a clone. If she is not a cloned soldier, then she is a baby.
Her family moved to Jiyuu and were supporters.... So what family does she have? There is no listing of family members under the history.
Grammar issue:and is awaiting placement as and an Enlisted Peacekeeper.
This is bit of temporal discontinuity.
The Peacekeepers came into being in YE 30, We are now 2/3 of the way through YE 31. There have been a number of Peacekeepers who entered the service back in YE 30. So either she was not in fact one of the first, or what has she been doing since her time there prior to getting an assignment. Also who recommended a recruit to attend the academy? According to the page attendance at the academy is for enlisted personnel to transition. This should probably be rewrtten.
This character is still pending.
Here are still some issues.
Hair Color and Style: Blue, Typically straight. (Still no description of its length. I presume that she just lets it hang free.)
History
Created on Taiie in early YE 29. - So is she a cloned soldier or a person if she was made for the 5th XF then she most likely was a clone. If she is not a cloned soldier, then she is a baby.
Her family moved to Jiyuu and were supporters.... So what family does she have? There is no listing of family members under the history.
Grammar issue:and is awaiting placement as and an Enlisted Peacekeeper.
This is bit of temporal discontinuity.
The Peacekeepers came into being in YE 30, We are now 2/3 of the way through YE 31. There have been a number of Peacekeepers who entered the service back in YE 30. So either she was not in fact one of the first, or what has she been doing since her time there prior to getting an assignment. Also who recommended a recruit to attend the academy? According to the page attendance at the academy is for enlisted personnel to transition. This should probably be rewrtten.
This character is still pending.
Ok Sekoriah, You are ready for the next step. You need to formally submit an order request, just a formality since Andrew has already said you are going to be in the UCS Akuro III Plot.
Also, You should probably remove your email address from your user page. We do not want your address to get picked up by spammers.
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Character is approved for IC usage.
Also, You should probably remove your email address from your user page. We do not want your address to get picked up by spammers.
Request Orders
Character is approved for IC usage.
