Approved Character Tsukino Ren

[Gardener in the dark]

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:tsukino_ren

I'm making this character as a sort of counter point to the more firy Ayaka, and also because I'm getting tired of waiting for Ayaka to be approved, and I figure it would be fun to play this character.

 

[Doshii Jun]

Her not being approved already is my fault, Gardener. If you want, I can approve her and you can leave this one, or I can evaluate this one, too.

 

[Gardener in the dark]

Hrm... well Ren is for the 21st, but I don't know what plotship to put Ayaka on... I guess look at them both!

 

[SSharp]

Hey, can a Character Mod check this out? Gardener is still active on IRC, and is only waiting on the final few edits before approval.

And since there is an absence of one, I'll try to help you out with those edits, Gardener.

First off, it'd be better if you shortened down "Maintenance and Repair: Specialty kludge jobs" as a skill name to just "Maintenance and Repair". Same with "Medical: Specialty Emergency First aid and Maintenance of Consciousness" just make it plain ole' "Medical".

Then, I would think that your piloting skill is a bit short on text. Pilot what vehicles? etc. etc. As a guide, you could check out Nashoba's NPC from the 21st Squadron.

Other than that, I really see no problem. Good job.

(OOC: Warning. This post was made only a few minutes after waking up. Accept advice at your own risk!)

 

[Nashoba]

Ok, Approved.

Now you need to request orders