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Approved Character Uindo Denkou

Aendri

Inactive Member
Name: Uindo Denkou


General Information

Species: Yamataian
Gender: Male
Age: 24

Family / Creators: Uindo Tategami(mother), Uindo Hato (sister)(deceased), Uindo Hebi(brother), Uindo Taka(brother), Uindo Kurohyou (sister), Uindo Same (father)(missing)

Employer: SAoY
Occupation: Power Armor Pilot
Rank: Santo Hei
Current Assignment: N/A


Physical Characteristics

Height: 5' 8" / 172.5 cm
Weight: 137 lbs / 62.14 kg
Measurements: C- 39 in, W- 27.3 in, H- 33.15 in
Bra Size: N/A

Build and Skin Color: Denkou is built lean and wiry, more the snake style muscle than brute strength. However, he has the well toned and muscled body of an athlete. He has very lightly tanned Caucasian skin, tanned across his entire body.
Facial Features and Eye Color: His facial features are very similar to that of the stereotypical Asian, though they are leaner in quality, with a long face, and very slightly accentuated cheekbones. His eyes are blue-grey, and very light in that shade.
Hair Color and Style: His hair is black, and about 3 inches long. It is very straight, and lays down neatly on his head if given a bit of attention. He generally just allows his hair to hang loose, with only minimal care.

Distinguishing Features: He has a genetic tattoo on his right shoulder of a bolt of lightning and a dragon twining together, all encased in a twenty pointed star.


Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Denkou's personality would be nothing special at all if it were not for a few personality quirks. These quirks include him having a very slight amount of OCD, showing both in his habitual cleanliness, and his need to keep his body in good condition. However, this may be explained by a slight inferiority complex, which cases him to constantly feel a driving need to become better at everything. While this has benefited him by causing him to be in amazing physical shape, it also is slightly detrimental to his relationships with other men, with him either viewing them as people to be surpassed, or inferior people not as worthy as him. However, he has a deep respect for women, stemming from his early relationship with his mother, which causes him to be able to forgive almost any fault in a woman.

Likes: Exercising, women, healthy food, work
Dislikes: Weaklings, nerds(?), litterers, uncleanliness, criminal behavior
Goals: Rise above everyone else, create justice for all.


History

Denkou had a fairly normal life growing up, not excelling in school but never far from the top. It can be assumed that both his respect for women and his inferiority complex issued from these days, as his mother was a single mother, the father of her children having abandoned her after a short time. Growing up as the second oldest, he was never the best at things in his family, though he had a great desire to be the best. This is most likely the cause of his inferiority complex. His respect for women comes from watching his mother raise 5 children on her own, especially because she never accepted help or charity from anyone, preferring to provide for her large family though her own effort. Later on in his life, his elder sister was brutally raped and murdered, and when the murderer walked free, it began his crusade against crime. however, instead of turning into a vigilante, he went legitimate, joining the police force at seventeen, missing his last half-year of schooling. He then proceeded to amass a spectacular record, being wounded twice, once in the hand, once in the foot. While his left hand will always retain a slight stiffness, this is mostly mental, not physical. He also obtained one of the best arrest records seen, having arrested over 50 culprits in two months at one point. Because of his extreme skill and potential, he was promoted to sergeant, and given a police squad to run. However, at 23 years of age, he experienced a mental shock beyond anything he could have dreamed of when the man he respected most, the Captain of his force, was found guilty of money laundering and assault. With his world shaken to it's very core, he quit the force, and spent the next month living off of odd jobs he found. Following this, he decided to enlist in the military, as a way to retain and improve his capabilities, and perhaps further his goals of justice.


Skills

Communications: Denkou is familiar with basic radio operation and procedures and can make transmissions to and receive transmissions from other characters through headsets, starships, power armor, and shuttles in both combat and non-combat conditions. He is fluent in Nepleslian and Yamataian. He can speak and write both correctly and efficiently and can write reports, fill forms, issue orders under fire, etc. He has trained his voice so that it is clear cut and precise, making it so that there can be no issue with his voice when it is transmitted across a radio or other such object.

Fighting: Denkou received hand-to-hand combat training, followed up with a rigorous training program. He is skilled and experienced in combat both in Yamatai-like conditions and in zero-gravity, with and without weapons. Weapons he is trained in include energy pistols, knives, grenades, energy rifles, swords, and power armor.

Technology Operations: Denkou is capable of operating any computer system that uses the Kessaku OS, found on all Star Army starships. He is proficient in entering and/or searching for information. He is also proficient in basic file logging and key logging programs.

Mathematics:Denkou received basic mathematics training, including up to algebra and trigonometry. He is not bad with his math, but does not have the natural talent that some people have.

Physical: Due to his natural physical talent, Denkou has a great physique, with well defined muscles and strength. As a child, he enjoyed sports greatly, excelling in everything he tried. However, his favorite sport was running, and he would spend at least an hour every day running as far and as fast as he could. Because of this, he has great stamina, as well as a very good pace. He can run for hours, never changing pace, which benefit's him greatly while under the stress and drain of combat. He also loved martial arts and swimming, martial arts because he loved fighting and anything that gave him a work out, and swimming because it was a great way to train his body.

Entertainment: Denkou has always felt inferior to his younger brother when it comes to such things as deportment and the fine arts. Seeing as he has no great love for large groups of people, and makes no effort to be friends with people in high places, it is only fitting that he attempt to learn the fine arts to match his brother. He set about learning both instruments and singing, having more success with the later than the former. He has a fairly steady baritone voice, and is well able to carry a tune with great skill. He has some skill with the flute, but has never gone into great depth in this field.

Fighting (archaic): He has some skill in both fencing and ancient style sword fighting, as well as having skill in unarmed combat through martial arts. While this has no real use in modern combat, He is quite useful in close confines where guns are no longer feasible. Also, he is a good choice for a bodyguard, for both ceremonial and actual purposes due to his skill with ceremonial equipment.


OOC Notes

I believe I am done.
 
1. Is he tan ... everywhere?

2. Light blue-grey, as in nearly white-grey?

3. A genetic tattoo that isn't a barcode? So his whole family has it, and passed it on?

4. ... Sounds like a momma's boy. So he doesn't see women as human, but as goddesses, more or less?

5. History: Hmmmmmmm ...

I'm not going to hold you back on this, but I'd like to know exactly how he was so good at catching criminals. Not to mention where he was stationed. This is Yamatai; crime on the level of 50 in two months? That just seems absolutely incredible, knowing bits of law enforcement from my journalism career. Kim, do you know whether that's a large number?

My biggest bone to pick with it though -- why is he not Military Police? He can be that and a power armor pilot, and if you list how many years he was in the police force, it could even more fully justify him being that.

Otherwise, well-written.

6. Skills: ... Rmm. In general, you doubled up every skill that counts -- giving it more skills than boilerplate, instead of personalizing it.

a. Communications: Talking about his voice being clear cut and precise, that does not need to be there. Just say that he does it in the RP. It's not a real skill; listening to a police scanner five nights a week, I can tell you that with the radios we have in this setting, and in any police setting on Yamatai, your voice is either clear or it isn't.

b. Fighting: This skill is clearly doubled up with ancient sword fighting, fencing, and unarmed martial arts. Unarmed martial arts are unnecessary; they're already in the boilerplate. You've also got knives in there, so please expand on the "ancient sword fighting" so we know what it includes. Also, please explain how and why he came to know that stuff.

c. Technology Operation: Again, doubled up. File logging and key logging? Is that truly necessary at the level of PANTHEON? I can see him maybe having earned his Kessaku Certificate, if that's listed somewhere ...

d. Physical: I'll buy it. But his love of fighting? You don't mention he likes that in his Likes under personality, and it isn't suggested elsewhere.

e. Good enough for Entertainment.

f. I can't stop you on the Leadership anymore. I will still discourage it -- prove in the RP that he's worthy of leading troops. If you want the skill though, take it -- I can't imagine him being a very good leader when he has no real respect for men, nor when he can't fault a woman for the life of him.

Overall: A very ... special, character. Well written, don't get me wrong! It's just a general bone I pick with characters -- instead of having them socially apt and being not the best fighters, people make their characters great fighters and social screw-ups. The RP is furthered by the former, I think, but that's me.

This character is pending.
 
50 does seem incredibly high for 1 person in a couple of months. Because this means that in 1 month there are only 3 days that month that he did NOT arrest someone. But it depends on what he was arresting them for. If there are a lot of riots, that would result in a large number but he wouldn't be doing that alone, most police officers have partners.

I know most departments have to have so many pieces of moving paperwork a month to prove that they are actually working so in low crime areas they just write a LOT of traffic tickets for minor things in order to get their 83 paperwork quota. Were these guys violent offenders; jaywalkers; white collar; drunks; what? Why is the number so high? Even cops get a couple days off a week and multiple arrests at once require assistance from other officers. And processing arrests does take a while, most shifts are 8-12 hours and if there is that high of a volume in crime in that precinct, he wouldn't be the only one wth a lot of arrests.

But honestly, is this a character based on Yamatai? We didn't even have a national currency until 6 years ago ICly. It seems more like the really slow police district as far as crime goes considering. I'd buy the high crime rate better on Nepleslia in Funky City.
 
Doshii Jun said:
1. Is he tan ... everywhere?

2. Light blue-grey, as in nearly white-grey?

3. A genetic tattoo that isn't a barcode? So his whole family has it, and passed it on?

4. ... Sounds like a momma's boy. So he doesn't see women as human, but as goddesses, more or less?

5. History: Hmmmmmmm ...

I'm not going to hold you back on this, but I'd like to know exactly how he was so good at catching criminals. Not to mention where he was stationed. This is Yamatai; crime on the level of 50 in two months? That just seems absolutely incredible, knowing bits of law enforcement from my journalism career. Kim, do you know whether that's a large number?

My biggest bone to pick with it though -- why is he not Military Police? He can be that and a power armor pilot, and if you list how many years he was in the police force, it could even more fully justify him being that.

Otherwise, well-written.

6. Skills: ... Rmm. In general, you doubled up every skill that counts -- giving it more skills than boilerplate, instead of personalizing it.

a. Communications: Talking about his voice being clear cut and precise, that does not need to be there. Just say that he does it in the RP. It's not a real skill; listening to a police scanner five nights a week, I can tell you that with the radios we have in this setting, and in any police setting on Yamatai, your voice is either clear or it isn't.

b. Fighting: This skill is clearly doubled up with ancient sword fighting, fencing, and unarmed martial arts. Unarmed martial arts are unnecessary; they're already in the boilerplate. You've also got knives in there, so please expand on the "ancient sword fighting" so we know what it includes. Also, please explain how and why he came to know that stuff.

c. Technology Operation: Again, doubled up. File logging and key logging? Is that truly necessary at the level of PANTHEON? I can see him maybe having earned his Kessaku Certificate, if that's listed somewhere ...

d. Physical: I'll buy it. But his love of fighting? You don't mention he likes that in his Likes under personality, and it isn't suggested elsewhere.

e. Good enough for Entertainment.

f. I can't stop you on the Leadership anymore. I will still discourage it -- prove in the RP that he's worthy of leading troops. If you want the skill though, take it -- I can't imagine him being a very good leader when he has no real respect for men, nor when he can't fault a woman for the life of him.

1) Yes he is. Everywhere.
2) Almost silver-blue, not quite though. Very light steel-blue.
3) Yes. It is the family's, umm... symbol, I guess you could say. Like a coat of arms.
4) Not quite goddesses, more like demi-goddesses. :) But no, just as higher than men.
5) Yeah, not all of those were major arrests. Most were minor crime, not murder or assault. And yes, he had a partner, so it was not just him.
6)a. OK, I'll drop that part.
b. Umm, I was under the expression that the sword fighting went under fighting, or should I separate them? But he picked it up when he was studying martial arts and other sports. It would mainly include skill with an epee, foil, and longsword, and knowledge of how to use this in combat.
c. I meant more in the modern sense of password recovery, file recovery, that kind of thing. Should I just get rid of it? I can deal without it.
d. I'll add that in the likes. I've been trying to come up with the phrase for it, but I think I will just go with a love of physical activity.
f. I'll kill that for a second fighting if you want, and use the slot for a second fighting skill to include martial arts and sword fighting.
 
Thank you for the bump.

The problem with sword fighting is that it's almost not a combat skill. It's not like he'll carry a sword and whatnot ... it's kind of a "cool factor." But, eh, you've written it well, and shown some good writing in the past. That's what counts.

But yeah, I'd use the "Leadership" slot for something else.
 
You'll have opportunities to gain more skill slots and train new skills later, in case you're worried about getting pigeon-holed as a grunt.
 
Nah, I've been around long enough to know better than that. While I have your attention, you have any suggestions for a good SP plot for me? And check the second fighting skill for me.
 
Second fighting skill approved.

You want to wait around to hear Yangfan's response? You're ready to go at this point.
 
Well, I'm holding off on recruiting new players for the Celia for now. So the only place I could point you to is the list of plot-ships on the wiki.
 
Aendri said:
Eh, leave this here so he can respond if you want to. Or not. I'm going to wikify it, and apply for orders.
Was this ever wikified?
 
Yes. Character was wikified and played out. I didn't want to bring him back after his plot died though, and he got deleted if I remember correctly.
 
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