This research was further pushed along by the YE 29 encounter between the LSDF, YSS Sakura, and Black Spiral. The resulting data gathered from the conflict was enough to guide Lorath armor development from that point onward.
How is witnessing a brief battle going to spur your power armor development? If you're referring to the idea of power armor (rather than mecha), then say so clearly.
through the endeavors of the United Manufacturing Cooperative and it's duty
It's design is primarily focused on survivability,
Its duty. "It's" only means "it is." You should know this by now.
Ground speed: 90 MPH
Air speed (Combat Mode): 390 MPH
Air speed (Flight Mode): Mach 3.5
Zero Atmosphere (STL): .370c
Zero Atmosphere (FTL, subspace drive): 3000c
Zero Atmosphere (FTL, CDD): 500c
Great, just what we need, another super-speed power armor. Why not follow the trend of the Daisy and come up with armor that's armor, not a wearable space ship?
a Antimatter Munitions Launcher system mounted upon it's
An. Its.
Should be ADR 4. In fact, your whole list of anti-matter munitions on
this page each need to be knocked down by one point each.
Plasma Saber which includes its own power supply
Another grammar failure. It's in the rules that you proofread the submissions, you know.
Armor Composition
Exterior Shell Component Composition: Duremium Alloy
Joint Composition: Class-A Structol
Insulation Layer Composition: Boron-Carbide
Damage Rating
ADR 4
Structural Points
15 SP
Armor materials don't have DRs anymore. They have categories (light, medium, heavy).
Seing as this entire submission is essentially a clone of the Mindy, right down to the modular components, why should this get 15 SP when a Mindy, being a light power armor, only gets 6 to 10 SP?
Interior Control Suit Options
Due to the size of the Maelstrom, conventional pilot compartments found aboard the AMX-Series armor could not be utilized. As a measure to promote survivability of the Maelstrom and the pilot of the Maelstrom, the option was taken to incorporate a pre-existing armor system as a control suit. This feature also accounts for providing the Maelstrom with a sizable portion of it's operational equipment without actually dedicating a portion of the Maelstrom itself to the functions covered by the control armor. The inserted control suit effectively wears the Maelstrom upon it. The Maelstrom's systems are connected to the control suit through hardwire interface thus allowing for the two systems to work in tandem. To promote optimal fit, the interior of the Maelstrom includes an insulation layer of soft structol material which conforms to the inserted control suit and utilizes Class-B structol to create hardwire interfaces.
Lo-M1-3 / SDI-M3 Hunter Powered Suit
An option for interior control suit includes the Lo-M1-3 (SDI-M3) Hunter Powered Suit.
Gust Armor System
Part of the original Maelstrom project concept founded by the Lorath, the option of utilizing a 'Wind' Armor Series with Gust Armor Kit remains available.
Tenshi no Yoru Light Mechanized Power Armor
To facilitate usage by Peacekeeper forces, the Maelstrom includes the possibility of utilizing the Tenshi no Yoru 'Tenshi' Light Mechanized Power Armor as an internal control suit.
Hell no. There's no way I'm letting you get away with wearing two power armors at the same time. Extremely lame and impractical, not to mention unfair from a game balance perspective.
Energy/Matter Converter
To facilitate some of the Maelstrom's needs such as structol nutrient supplies, weapon system plasma, and engine plasma the Maelstrom includes a basic energy-to-matter converter which can convert power from the QNC into matter which is distributed from the converter to needed systems through a series of Class-A structol tubes which utilize a pulsating motion to push matter through the armor much like a vascular system.
Power armors should not have matter synthesizers in general. They shouldn't fit. No other PA has this ability. This submission shouldn't either. Instead, there should be a finite amount of material like with the Mindy Nodal Fabrication module.
Borrowing from the Tenshi armor series,
Did they get permission? From who, when, and how?
Subspace Drive System
The Maelstrom includes a compact Enhanced Subspace Wave Drive. However, due to the compact nature of the system it is only able to deliver a maximum speed of 3000c.
That's still tremendously fast, enough to make having a starship optional. It's even faster that the Mindy, which has superior FTL tech (CFS)! Also, if it's using an Enhanced Subspace Wave Drive, it should have a projector for that...which the article doesn't mention.
The Maelstrom includes common and uncommon Lorath Sensor Packages in tandem with the sensors which could be found aboard the control-suit within the Maelstrom.
First of all, the sensors in the suit within the suit wouldn't work because they'd be blocked. Secondly, it's lame how you're trying to nonchalantly place supposedly "uncommon" sensors on a mass-production common power armor.
Where the heck do all these sensors fit? On the Mindy 1H, each sensor has a specific location listed. If you're going to stuff a power armor with sensors (which is totally unnecessary--it's a power armor, not a ship), at least give them physical bulk and presence.
Mobility Enhancement System
To enhance the ground mobility of the Maelstrom, a series of electomagnetic driven rollers are included in the feet of the Maelstrom. These rubber-treaded rollers are capable of moving the Maelstrom at considerable speeds over ground surfaces. These rollers can include an adhesive system for traveling on starship hulls.
Oh really? I feel intellectually ripped off, but this particular item is not a problem with the submission, just another similarity with the Mindy.
The Maelstrom includes mounting brackets on it's forearms
Its. Get it right.
How is it that you have two weapons per hand AND a forearm mounting system?
separates into it's individual components
Continued grammar failure.
Grappling Cable Launcher
Located on the undersides of the forearms of the Maelstrom are two small launch tubes intended solely for the purpose of launching a grappling hook device. The grappling hook itself is designed to utilize a set of retractable prongs and magnetic forces to secure itself upon an anchor point. The grappling hook is secured to the Maelstrom by a stonethread weave cord which is capable of sustaining up to one-hundred tons of pressure before cord failure. Each launcher contains two-hundred meters of cable fixed onto a magnetic reel system.
While a grappling system is a novel idea, it should probably saved for a forearm hardpoint, as you appear to already have too much stuff on the forearm/hand area.
