Approved Submission VDR-2 SR

[Bullroarer]

Submission Type: Weapon
Template Used: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=templates:weapon
Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:corp:black_star_industries:vdr_2_sr
Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:black_star_industries:vdr_2_sr

Faction: Vekimen
FM Approved Yet? (Yes/No; Who, When) Yes @Edto Xar'Sivaree
Faction requires art? (Yes/No) no

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) Yes: ammo
Contains New art? (Yes/No) yes
Previously Submitted? (Yes/No; explain reason if rejected) no

Notes: uses the 12.7x99mm cartridge

 

[Edto Xar'Sivaree]

approved

 

[Ametheliana]

Please link as much as you can before I give this another pass.

The "anyone with a brain" part is a little bit edgey and could probably be nixed.

 

[FrostJaeger]

@Ametheliana - not to be rude, but wasn't @META_mahn going to be looking this one over...?

 

[Bullroarer]

updated.

 

[Ametheliana]

It doesn't matter who looks it over as long as it gets done, Frost.

 

[Ametheliana]

This review is for: VDR-2 with URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:corp:black_star_industries:vdr_2_sr
The submitted article is/has…
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] A very high level of overall quality
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] No red and/or broken links
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Obtusely redundant
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Lacking Detail
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[\(◕‿◕)/ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
To the submitter: Is this a refit or overhaul of a previous article? If yes, provide a link and a list of changes.

Notes:
7. In general, abbreviations should not be used as titles (use Imperial Registry Number, not IRN).

I'll finish this today.

 

[Ametheliana]

I noticed the changes.

Approved