This review is for: Weaponized Kawaii
The submitted article is/has…
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header[/color] Fixed location, spelling, and sentence structure for this for you
[X] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)[/color]
[ ] Needed and/or useful to the setting Still not entirely convinced
[X] In the proper format/template[/color] Forced line breaks ( \\ ) removed
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar[/color] You need to learn when to use "its."
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)[/color]
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible[/color] Explosive method not explained
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[NA] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[X] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[NA] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Why is this needed and/or useful to the setting? How does this make SARP more fun?
Status: Pending
I intend to finish this review by: Nov 15 2010