Approved Character X2 Character Combo: Arcturus Sargas

[Arbitrated]

The nerd in question here: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:arctutus_sargas

Again, the GM I need is @HAMnJAM

The FM I need is @FrostJaeger

@Ametheliana is just that cool, especially for giving input on things


This is Armin's twin brother, so yes they have nearly identical personalities and histories as I intend. Additionally, they do in fact look the same: Identical twins!

 

[HAMnJAM]

Just change Fightercraft Pilot with this and it has my approval if the FMs give the okay.

 

[Ametheliana]

Lol I didn't read Ham's response and was ready to tell you what he told you lol.

All of it is really great. History is sharp.

 

[Arbitrated]

Both characters have been updated!


Thanks for the History comment- dang ninjas on the forum... XD

 

[Kim]

As with the other, once @FrostJaeger chimes in, I think you'll be good. Just link them together. =)

 

[Arbitrated]

I think I did link them? Unless I'm supposed to put it elsewhere.... They are linked in the connections tab (for both pages).

 

[META_mahn]

And...then I walk over here and note that section on how they possibly got promoted to Nito Hei.
So my complaints list is a little different.

• Please copypaste the "Although the brothers had progressed through training normally, they had been stationed at Fort Victory for some time." in History onto Armin's page, as well.\
• Nothing else. (pls go easy on me, it's my first time doing co-FM character approvals)

 

[Kim]

Once the changes are made, these boys should be good to go.

 

[Arbitrated]

@META_mahn uhhhh.... Both pages have had that paragraph.

I literally copied their histories and changed the names when needed, so IDK how you missed it the first time around o .o

 

[META_mahn]

I swear that wasn't there before...Arble, what did I tell you about messing around with Space powers again?

Seems Legit

 

[FrostJaeger]

@Arbitrated - Here's my review of Arcturus Sargas (that was mostly copy-pasta'd from my review of Armin Sargas).

• In the Preferred Plots section, would you mind adding a link to the YSS Imperator's plot page, please?

• In the Physical Description section, would you mind section, would you mind bolding the first part of each item ("Height," "Weight," etc.)? It's alright if you don't - it would just look a bit better and be a bit more readable in my humble opinion.

• For the Personality section, a few things:
  • Would you mind telling me more about Arcturus' personality, please? Two or three sentences should do the trick.
  • What led to Arcturus becoming so "energetic" and "... incapable of sitting still[?]"
  • Why does - or what led to - Arcturus "...tak[ing] direct solutions to a problem after moments of decision-making[?]"

• For the History section:
  • What was Arcturus' relationship with his parents growing up?
  • Did either of said parents serve in the Fourth Elysian War and/or the Second Mishhuvurthyar War? If so, what effect did it have on them?
  • Why did Arcturus "...learn quickly from any of [his] mistakes[?]" Were his parents strict or something similar?
  • What was school like for Arcturus?
  • Why did Arcturus spend "...two or so years [in] isolation...[?]"
  • What effect did close-to-home - I mean no offense, but they were not "...dozens of systems away..." - events such (such as Battle of Artume, the fall of Anakes, the fall of Veritas, and the infamous Battle of Elysia) have on
    Arcturus?
  • Did Arcturus' parents approve of him joining the Star Army of Yamatai? If not, what was their reaction?
  • What was training at Fort Victory like for Arcturus?
    
  • Where did Arcturus train to become a pilot (Fort Hanako's Flight School?) and what was it like for him? What led to him wanting to become a pilot, anyways?
  • What was Arcturus' relationship with his brother during the this time?
    
  • When/where/why/etc. did Arcturus become friends with Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent?
  • When did Arcturus transfer into a Caelisolan body?

• For the Skills Learned section:
  • Would you mind making each skill its own sub-header, please?
  • Would you mind adding another sentence or two to each of skill's description, please?

• For the Social Connections section:
  • Would you mind changing the names of Arcturus' parents to something a little more Elysian, please? These generators are good source of inspiration, in my humble opinion.
    • Ancient Greek Names
    • Greek Names
    • Hellenic Names
    • Latin Names
    • Roman Names
  • Would you mind adding the age and species of Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent, please?

Apart from the above, everything else looks ready for launch. [/QUOTE]

 

[FrostJaeger]

Having looked over the updates mentioned here, as the Faction Manager of Elysia I hereby APPROVE Arcturus Sargas for usage within the roleplay.

(I also just noticed the typo at the end my previous post >.<)

 

[HAMnJAM]

APPROVED