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Approved Character X2 Character Combo: Arcturus Sargas

Lol I didn't read Ham's response and was ready to tell you what he told you lol.

All of it is really great. History is sharp.
 
I think I did link them? Unless I'm supposed to put it elsewhere.... They are linked in the connections tab (for both pages).
 
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And...then I walk over here and note that section on how they possibly got promoted to Nito Hei.
So my complaints list is a little different.
  • Please copypaste the "Although the brothers had progressed through training normally, they had been stationed at Fort Victory for some time." in History onto Armin's page, as well.\
  • Nothing else. (pls go easy on me, it's my first time doing co-FM character approvals)
 
@META_mahn uhhhh.... Both pages have had that paragraph.

I literally copied their histories and changed the names when needed, so IDK how you missed it the first time around o .o
 
@Arbitrated - Here's my review of Arcturus Sargas (that was mostly copy-pasta'd from my review of Armin Sargas).
  • In the Physical Description section, would you mind section, would you mind bolding the first part of each item ("Height," "Weight," etc.)? It's alright if you don't - it would just look a bit better and be a bit more readable in my humble opinion.
  • For the Personality section, a few things:
    • Would you mind telling me more about Arcturus' personality, please? Two or three sentences should do the trick.
    • What led to Arcturus becoming so "energetic" and "... incapable of sitting still[?]"
    • Why does - or what led to - Arcturus "...tak[ing] direct solutions to a problem after moments of decision-making[?]"
  • For the Skills Learned section:
    • Would you mind making each skill its own sub-header, please?
    • Would you mind adding another sentence or two to each of skill's description, please?
Apart from the above, everything else looks ready for launch. [/QUOTE]
 
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