Approved Character X2 Character Combo: Armin Sargas

[Arbitrated]

The nerd in question: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:armin_sargas

The GM of the YSS Imperator: @HAMnJAM

The FM of Elysia, and also a generally helpful person: @FrostJaeger

Another generally helpful and super awesome person: @Ametheliana

 

[HAMnJAM]

Just change Fightercraft Pilot with this and it has my approval if the FMs give the okay.

 

[Kim]

Looks pretty good, I just think the secondary character needs to be linked.

 

[META_mahn]

Smol Issues:

• How'd he get Nito Hei? Is he really good at what he does, or did he get that from some minor duty?
• The rest seems fine.

Edit: Herp-a-derp, I reviewed this before Arc's sheet and I noticed that Arc's sheet had the reason why.

 

[FrostJaeger]

@Arbitrated - Here's my review of Armin Sargas.

• In the Preferred Plots section, would you mind adding a link to the YSS Imperator's plot page, please?

• In the Physical Description section, would you mind section, would you mind bolding the first part of each item ("Height," "Weight," etc.)? It's alright if you don't - it would just look a bit better and be a bit more readable in my humble opinion.

• For the Personality section, a few things:
  • Would you mind telling me more about Armin's personality, please? Two or three sentences should do the trick.
  • What led to Armin becoming so extroverted and risk-taking?
  • Why does - or what led to - Armin prefer[ring] "...to take routes to his objective that seem to be non-conventional[?]"

• For the History section:
  • What was Armin's relationship with his parents growing up?
  • Did either of said parents serve in the Fourth Elysian War and/or the Second Mishhuvurthyar War? If so, what effect did it have on them?
  • Why did Armin "...learn quickly from any of [his] mistakes[?]" Were his parents strict or something similar?
  • What was school like for Armin?
  • Why did Armin spend "...two or so years [in] isolation...[?]"
  • What effect did close-to-home - I mean no offense, but they were not "...dozens of systems away..." - events such (such as Battle of Artume, the fall of Anakes, the fall of Veritas, and the infamous Battle of Elysia) have on
    Armin?
  • Did Armin's parents approve of him joining the Star Army of Yamatai? If not, what was their reaction?
  • What was training at Fort Victory like for Armin?
    
  • Where did Armin train to become a pilot (Fort Hanko's Flight School?) and what was it like for him? What led to him wanting to become a pilot, anyways?
  • What was Armin's relationship with his brother during the this time?
    
  • When/where/why/etc. did Armin become friends with Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent?
  • When did Armin transfer into a Caelisolan body?

• For the Skills Learned section:
  • Would you mind making each skill its own sub-header, please?
  • Would you mind adding another sentence or two to each of skill's description, please?

• For the Social Connections section:
  • Would you mind changing the names of Armin's parents to something a little more Elysian, please? These generators are good source of inspiration, in my humble opinion.
    • Ancient Greek Names
    • Greek Names
    • Hellenic Names
    • Latin Names
    • Roman Names
  • Would you mind adding the age and species of Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent, please?

Apart from the above, everything else looks ready for launch.

 

[Arbitrated]

• In the Preferred Plots section, would you mind adding a link to the YSS Imperator's plot page, please?

• In the Physical Description section, would you mind section, would you mind bolding the first part of each item ("Height," "Weight," etc.)? It's alright if you don't - it would just look a bit better and be a bit more readable in my humble opinion.

Should be easy.

For the Personality section, a few things:

• Would you mind telling me more about Armin's personality, please? Two or three sentences should do the trick.
• What led to Armin becoming so extroverted and risk-taking?
• Why does - or what led to - Armin prefer[ring] "...to take routes to his objective that seem to be non-conventional[?]"

Some people just like to live a little more dangerously.

For the History section:

• What was Armin's relationship with his parents growing up?
• Did either of said parents serve in the Fourth Elysian War and/or the Second Mishhuvurthyar War? If so, what effect did it have on them?
• Why did Armin "...learn quickly from any of [his] mistakes[?]" Were his parents strict or something similar?
• What was school like for Armin?
• Why did Armin spend "...two or so years [in] isolation...[?]"
• What effect did close-to-home - I mean no offense, but they were not "...dozens of systems away..." - events such (such as Battle of Artume, the fall of Anakes, the fall of Veritas, and the infamous Battle of Elysia) have on
  Armin?
• Did Armin's parents approve of him joining the Star Army of Yamatai? If not, what was their reaction?
• What was training at Fort Victory like for Armin?
• Where did Armin train to become a pilot (Fort Hanko's Flight School?) and what was it like for him? What led to him wanting to become a pilot, anyways?
• When/where/why/etc. did Armin become friends with Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent?
• When did Armin transfer into a Caelisolan body?

In order...
-They were uh... His parents?
-No
-Maybe
-Pretty typical for the time, how that translates probably needs clarification
-The uhh... The war. That was going on. Which their parents were afraid of.
-I misjudged distances on the map, and also didn't find any of these battles on the wiki :l
-Probably not
-It was uh, training?
-Most likely. He likes flying a lot so a pilot was a pretty good choice
-Basically any time before he left Elysia, primarily in school
-....I'll work on that

For the Skills Learned section:

• Would you mind making each skill its own sub-header, please?
• Would you mind adding another sentence or two to each of skill's description, please?

Seems pretty straightforward.

For the Social Connections section:

• Would you mind changing the names of url=https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:armin_sargas]Armin's[/url] parents to something a little more Elysian, please? These generators are good source of inspiration, in my humble opinion.
  • Ancient Greek Names
  • Greek Names
  • Hellenic Names
  • Latin Names
  • Roman Names
• Would you mind adding the age and species of Sarah Smith, Jack Mason, and Joeseph Argent, please?

Names smell. I guess I'll take a look at them though.

 

[Kim]

Let us know when you finish making changes! =)

 

[Arbitrated]

Ah yes-many apologies on the delays, events over the weekend put me out of the mood to work on these two. I'll be getting back into working on them soon.

 

[Arbitrated]

Both characters are updated!

 

[FrostJaeger]

Having looked over the updates, as the Faction Manager of Elysia I hereby APPROVE Armin Sargas for usage within the roleplay.

 

[HAMnJAM]

APPROVED