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10 mm Very Low Drag ammunition
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Status: This submission is in progress.
1. We're talking about a 10 mm-wide bullet that maybe, maybe, is 40 mm long. That's generous, but I don't know -- can we get a bullet measurement?
2. Even if it's at 40 mm long, the three specialty rounds you list are pretty hard to accept.
- a. The SGHEAP isn't detailed enough in its navigation system, but I would not bother. I'm rejecting that round as being beyond reasonable belief.
- b. The HEIAP I can accept, but we're talking about a pretty small amount of HE and a very small penetrator. Maybe 3 or 4 mm in diameter? If it's anti-armor, I'm not sure that's really going to be useful.
- c. The airburst just does not seem useful. Even if you build the round like an total-metal-jacketed round and stuff every last cubic millimeter with explosive, it's hardly going to do much against armor, and against unarmored targets it's basically a flashbang. The round is too small. I'm rejecting this too.
- d. Can you detail the ball ammunition? What is its composition, for instance.
3. Can we get a bullet weight for the ball? Understanding it's heavier than the 7 mm round ...
