Approved Submission [Yamatai] 8ga EM Ammunition

And this one too.

This review is for: 8 gauge Electromagnetic Shotgun Shells

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Status: This submission is in progress.

1. Can we get a caliber on the Nerimium shot and slug? I'd assume the slug is 21 mm, but that's up to you.

2. Please put some ranges on these -- at least the plasma slug, to differentiate it from the rifle.

3. Shotgun shells as we know them are packages, but these can't quite work the same way if we're talking about a railgun. Can you clarify how the shotgun shells are packaged? Including dimensions?

4. Can you cut the airburst down to a meter? It's only a (presumably) 21 mm slug.

Added in calibers for the Nerimium Shot and Slug- I'm not entirely sure just how large each individual pellet should be for the Armor Shot though. Ranges from the MASR article have been added, and a description of how the shells work (A ferrous sabot) has been added. Also I cut the airburst AoE down too.

Keep in mind that the gauge of the shells themselves doesn't limit the ball size for the cartridges. It determines the bore, not the ball, size. If you're using materials as dense as nerimium, you can probably stick with fairly small pellets and still get a fair amount of impact out of them.

I edited the armor shot to say "21 x 45 mm wad firing six #000 balls". It's a ferrous one.

You should mark the armor shot as "experimental," I think. PA have a lot of systems to cover spall, kinetic energy and armor impacts. A Nep or Mishhu armor, for instance, wouldn't really get touched by this thing, but test it out in the RP and see how it works.

The plasma slug looks cool.

After those, you're approved.

Changes made.