Approved Character [YSS Kaiyō] Arbitrated Shan

[Arbitrated]

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:character:arbitrated_shan
I think I'm doing this right @Ametheliana
Someone yell at me if I'm not... Oh also I'm going to bed after this rip.

 

[Ametheliana]

@Wes this one, too, please.

 

[Reynolds]

Not in charge of this, but since I was helping with some edits earlier, I thought I'd chime in on what I still see.

Need to make sure you list conversions between things like feet/cm or lb/kg so everyone is on equal footing. I would also think about setting up a 'checklist' of height/weight/hair/eyes/measurements/etc. in the description section, so people can glance at it and easily get a feel for your character instead of always having to read the entire paragraph to find the solid facts.

I would suggest moving some of the Personality bits to History to help flesh that out. You might also give a sentence or two more about her parents.

 

[Ametheliana]

Approved

 

[Arbitrated]

Oh thank the void you people support metric.
*ahem* yeah. I'll get that checklist sorted, too.

What parts should be moved to History anyways? Going through it not much I can see would go there without being redundant in that section.