Character page link here!
GM of the YSS Kaiyo: @Ametheliana
FM of Yamatai: @Wes
FM of Elysia: @FrostJaeger
Arinori is her surname.
GM of the YSS Kaiyo: @Ametheliana
FM of Yamatai: @Wes
FM of Elysia: @FrostJaeger
Arinori is her surname.
Should be easy.
- Would you mind adding more internal wiki links - Archangel, Star Army of Yamatai, etc. - to the article, please?
- In the Physical Description section, would you mind bolding the first part of each item ("Height," "Weight," etc.)? It's alright if you don't - it would just look a bit better and be a bit more readable in my humble opinion.
What caused Sora to develop "...an odd mix of attitudes, combining a social instigator with a logical, analytical think tank, with what could be considered a hero complex of some variation...[?]"
Some stuff comes naturally, I guess. Although the attitude mixture significantly comes from her social isolation, as stated later on. Namely the heroic and social instigation parts; someone who naturally is more open has an effect about them which causes people around them to rally or at least, "loosen up". I can work on the improvement part.What led to Sora always "...improving herself as if driven by an unfathomable force..." and "...[continuously] working, tirelessly prospecting self-recorded data and comparing it to what she had done in the relative past...[?]" A deep-seated desire to be a "better" hero?
Would you mind elaborating upon the situations described in the Personality section somewhere in the History please? For instance, did she become friends with the person(s) she was protecting?
Likely yes, or at least they wouldn't dislike her as openly or something.... I'll touch up on that. And the tutor, as well.Would you mind expanding the Social Connections section a bit, please? For instance, what is Sora's relationship with her biological parents - and how old are they? What is/was her relationship with the aforementioned tutor - and what is/was his or her age?
I'll need a bit of help with the formatting for this one I think.In the History section, would you mind making "INFANCY," "EARLY LIFE," and "EARLY ADULTHOOD" into proper sub-headers, please?
What effect did the racism have on Sora?
Well the racism... I'll work on that one. Regarding knowledge of the wars, while she was aware the wars were happening the attempts by her parents to keep her unaware of the details were mostly successful. So combined with the tutor she wasn't... All that aware of what actually happened, other than the fact that her home country was fighting some place called elysia and they were winning/they won... At least until the fourth war which I'll edit information into, even though there's basically no information about them.
She chose in some bits of spare time to read books on the subject of design and the like.What were the "personal choices" mentioned in the Engineering section?
Noted.As she currently has more than the seven skills permitted at character creation, would you mind reducing the number of skills Sora has? Star Army Common Skills count as four separate skills, not one.
Patrician.Big wingz o.o