Approved Character [YSS Kaiyo II] Riku Tanaka

[Sparkee0213]

My new character for the return of the Kaiyo! Already been reviewed privately by @Ametheliana but would love some more criticism. Riku Tanaka.

EDIT: Name change due to conflict with other player name. Minor change. Nothing else.

 

[Ametheliana]

Just a few minor changes.

Kyoto was called Geshrinopolis until YE 24, so change his birthplace name to that.

"...to being invading. At the..." (invaded, not invading)

"...of YE 40 Mark signs up for the Star Army..." (Can this be past tense?)

Anything else, @Wes?

 

[Sparkee0213]

@Ametheliana all the issues should be fixed. Just need any criticism from @Wes if he has any, or anyone else who wants to help beef him up.

 

[Ametheliana]

He's just a tad bit young - 1日 1月 YE 20 is the youngest he can be if he joined in early YE 40 (1日 1月 YE 40)

 

[Wes]

No issues from me.

 

[Ametheliana]

Approved