Approved Character YSS Kaiyo | Norogumi Misaki

[HAMnJAM]

Here goes my first attempt at Neko kind. "One Small Step of Ham, One Giant Furball for Jam Kind."

The ~Nyah Linky

@Ametheliana (GM)
@Wes (FM)

(Whoever Else I'm Forgetting)

 

[Ametheliana]

I like OOC notes says it's full of holes when it's pretty well filled out!

1. "At this duty station we became well..." Should be she.
2. "... while the medics rank around the bridge..." Should be ran.
3. You wrote "plumeria Gunship" once while all around it you wrote Plumeria gunship. Just a small thing I noticed that you could capitalize Plumeria instead of gunship.

Really small things I noticed. I'm going to run the history past a vet if I can, but it all checks out to me.

 

[Ametheliana]

They said about the history: It doesn't make sense for a Neko to go through one year of training. Here is a useful page for getting the times down.

 

[Wes]

It looks like, assuming she started as a starship operator, her training time at the start of her military service would be about 5 months.

 

[HAMnJAM]

I think I fixed the problems. Please check and inform me if I missed another thing.

 

[Ametheliana]

You fixed the problem.

Approved.

 

[HAMnJAM]

Yay!

 

[Ametheliana]

Go ahead and join in on the thread at any time.

Happy to have you aboard! I'll add you to the roster asap.