Approved Character [YSS Wyvern] Alexia Redfield

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 5, 2017

• #1

second member of the birb family for the wyvern

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:alexia_redfield

can expand on some of the descriptions if needed

 

Ethereal

Banned Member

Inactive Member

• Oct 5, 2017

• #2

@FrostJaeger just tagging you so you can reply if you see anything non-borb-canon, it all seems good to me

Approved

 

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FrostJaeger

Banned Member

• Oct 7, 2017

• #3

@club24 - here's my (belated >.<) review of Alexia Redfield. (That I copypasta'd straight outta Compton from here.)

• Would you mind changing the surnames of Alexia and her family members to something a little more Elysian-sounding, please? The following generators are, in my humble opinion, pretty good sources of inspiration:
  • List of Roman Gentes
  • Latin Names
  • Roman Names
• For the History section:
  • Would you mind adding more internal wiki links to this section, please?
  • What was Alexia's relationship with her brother while growing up?
  • What influenced Alexia's decision to enlist in the Star Army of Yamatai?
  • Similarly, why did Alexia decide to train as an Investigator?
  • What effect (if any) did the Second Mishhuvurthyar War and/or the Battle of Elysia have on Alexia?
• For the Social Connections section:
  • Did Alexia make any friends or enemies during her two years of service? If so, would you mind adding their names and species, please?
  • Would you mind adding the ages of Alexia's family members, please?

Apart from that, everything appears to be in good order, Officer.

 

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 8, 2017

• #4

I have addressed all the issues (i think) and have changed the page to suit the new name
Alexia Asellio
Let me know if i've missed anything

 

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FrostJaeger

Banned Member

• Oct 8, 2017

• #5

Having looked over the aforementioned edits, as the Faction Manager of Elysia I hereby APPROVE Alexia Asellio for usage within the roleplay.

 

Wes

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• Oct 17, 2017

• #6

Recently this character got some artwork, which is cool, but I noticed the character has a facial tattoo, which is against Star Army regulations.

I can't think of an explanation of why the Star Army would allow someone with this tattoo to enlist in the first place.

I would like to retcon the character to remove the tattoo. If that's not OK, I will issue orders to discharge the character from the Star Army at the next opportunity.

 

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 17, 2017

• #7

As discussed in discord conversation with Wes the bio will be changed to say its a temp thing for when she is off duty