Approved Character [YSS Wyvern] Icarus Redfield

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 3, 2017

• #1

made an elysian for ethereals jolly crew on this grand new plot

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:icarus_redfield

has basically been approved by him, but due process is required

 

Ethereal

Inactive Member

Banned Member

• Oct 3, 2017

• #2

Welcome aboard the Wyvern, Icarus Redfield!

Approved

 

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FrostJaeger

Banned Member

• Oct 7, 2017

• #3

@club24 - here's my (belated >.<) review of Icarus Redfield.

• Would you mind changing the surname of Icarus' and his family members to something a little more Elysian-sounding, please? The following generators are, in my humble opinion, pretty good sources of inspiration:
  • List of Roman Gentes
  • Latin Names
  • Roman Names
• For the History section:
  • Would you mind adding more internal wiki links to this section, please?
  • Not to be rude, but would you mind elaborating on what one of the "...more pure lines..." is? Although it was possible for them to rise in temporal and military ranks, all Plebeians were - and still are - considered to be equally "impure" due to their genes.
  • What was Icarus' decision to enlist in the Star Army of Yamatai?
  • Seeing as how he's a First Officer, when did Icarus graduate from the Kyoto War College - and what made him want to become a First Officer to begin with?
  • Similarly, why did Icarus decide to train as an Investigator?
  • What effect (if any) did the Second Mishhuvurthyar War and/or the Battle of Elysia have on Icarus?
• For the Social Connections section:
  • Did Icarus make any friends or enemies during his previous nine years of service -and if so, would you mind adding their names and species, please?
  • Would you mind adding the ages of Icarus' family members, please?

Apart from that, everything else looks good, Commissioner.

 

Last edited: Oct 7, 2017

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 7, 2017

• #4

i will get right on it

 

club24

Everything Is Magical

• Oct 7, 2017

• #5

I have made the listed edits and moved him to a new page to reflect the name change
he is now Icarus Asellio
Please let me know if there is anything I've missed

 

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FrostJaeger

Banned Member

• Oct 8, 2017

• #6

Having looked over the aforementioned edits, as the Faction Manager of Elysia I hereby APPROVE Icarus Asellio for usage within the roleplay.