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Rejected Character Zach Rendlar

Zach Rendlar

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Appearance:
Character name:Zach Rendlar

Species:Yamataian

Gender:Male

Age 115 (Looks about 16)

Eye color:White

Hair color:Grey

Skin color:White

Physique:Good muscle tone and athleticism.

Height: 6'3"

Weight: 185 pounds.

Family:

Father:Darren Rendlar

Mother:Ellen Rendlar

Brother:Sam Rendlar

Wife:None, as of yet

Next of kin:None, as of yet

Army:Star Army of Yamatai

Personality:

Social settings:He enjoys being by himself a lot to ruse over his revenge and he doesnt hang out with people much but because of what happenened to him he gets attached very easily.

Equipment:He constantly wears his spartan gear because he loves wearing it and it reminds him of his parents
and thats only thing he has from his past.

Motivation:The only thing keeping him going is his hatred, passion and will for revenge.

Physical appearance paranoia:He really doesnt care about his appearance because if someone likes him for
him then they deserve to be around him.

Demolitions, fighting, leadership, physical, rogue, survival and military, vehicles

History: As a child, the boy was taught to fight, and fight hard. His training went about as tough as any normal spartans would have, and as many know spartans were trained, mainly because his father wanted to leave a legacy for his family to be proud and famous for. He trained his son constantly never letting up on him, bringing him to his breaking point where his father led him to the vast snowy wilderness of his planet, where he fought a white tiger full fisted. Many scars were earned in that battle, a claw cut down his eye and he caught another one across the cheek and that brought a blood lust upon him where he threw the tiger against the cliff and continued to fight it until he was so obsessed with victory that he conquered above his pathetic opponent. He returned to his father where he became healed again and finally faced and defeated his father, where he was given an ancient set of spartan armor, found on a planet that was far from the system. He smiled and donned the equipment with pride. He walked to his family with his cape, spartan helmet with the horizontal fan along the top of it and the boots the rose to his knees and his massive shield with his vambraces, and not only that but he also wore a main plate body. He smiled for one of the first times in his life, since his life began so roughly. The next thing he notices is ships as bright as the sun descending upon his planet blasting almost everything,but while his family let him take cover in the safehouse they were caught in the blast. After the constant pounding was over he walked out of the house and looked up at the sky and found a gun at the back of his head, where he realized he had to give up. He was captured and recaptured and well recaptured again, where a rescue party saved him, with out meaning to, and was recruited into the army, where he was actually trained in the high-tech weaponry of that army, yet for his own reasons he wielded his sais and his spartan armor. The only memory he had of his parents and he intended on shattering the empire that crushed his planet and killed his parents.
 
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No ... just ... no.

Most of the time, I'm willing to give credence to a player's first bio submission. You probably did not even suspect there were rules involved on this board.

But ... damn, dude. I mean, we're talking lesbian cat girls here with starships and guns.

No spartan armor. No sais. No cape.

Give it another go, with the proper formatting, and when you do, I'll come back and look at it again. Thanks dude.

EDIT: It's already been edited to add skills. Too many, but at least they're there.
 
1, Your layout it wrong.

2, History is impossible.

However if you like the Greeks, as I do, you may consider joining the local pseudo-Ancient Greek race: The Elysians.
 
I think someone likes 300 a little to much :p

Sorry hun, like the others said this is way to far off. Such sparse armor in this setting would be laughed at. Look over the site, see what we are about, then go ahead and revise the character.

Yamatians have not been around for 115 years. Yamatians are not 6'3. (Least never seen one that big.)

If you want a character like a spartan? Big and brawny? Go with a Nepleslian.

Like Doshii said hun, this character is just wrong. You need to seriously go back and look over the different profiles first, then think over what you really want to play, look through some of the rp's, and THEN start writting a profile hun.
 
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