* Uhh, sorry, what? By "loose" do you mean "lose?" And if so, what do you mean by "lose fast and leave an interesting RP problem behind?" The phrasing "Leaving an interesting RP problem behind" suggests they are now gone, which means extinction. So how can they be occupied? Are they simply going to be enslaved, or eradicated completely by mysterious invader?
* They are intended to be occupied by one of the current races. Hopefuly Neplesia
Who is the invader? Keep in mind, if a race is advanced/expansive enough to conquer other planets, they would likely have a small empire already. A nation of this complexity would need a full racial writeup for them, including culture, origin, etc.
*The invader is Asmodeus. Rather he makes up an invader to get the Zelacoorians to attack the Neplesians. Asmodeus is a Nepleslian. He calls the new "races" (Neps, Yamatai, Elisians) the crawlers, runners, and fliers.
Why did not one, but three Earth colony ships aim for the same planet, when there are dozens -- if not hundreds -- of colonizable worlds to choose from?
*I thought I had included that... List is still quite disorganized. The star is holy. The three ships were from branches of the same religion
The Swimmer forerunners had the time and resources to engineer an entire generation with gills, and raise the said generation before they died. Wouldn't it have been much easier and quicker to do something like...building a boat to find land? Or since their original starship is capable of sea travel, why couldn't they just use that to travel somewhere more suitable?
*The swimmers were incredibly agorophobic. That means wide open spaces = teh fear. They've lost some of that since landing, having to leave the ship into the ocean, but they still have troubles about it. A swimmer who is not either surrounded by walls, or in a enviroment suit is an unhappy swimmer indeed.
Don't cram everything into one big ball of submission. Some of your leader profiles are too detailed to be article stubs (dress, personality, even who they have crushes on?), and should be separated into their own profile articles. Solar systems and planets should possibly be separated as well, since physical locations don't really fit into a race's culture article, unless they're culturally significant. Each species has its own government, culture, and ideology, technology...they have nothing in common aside from a home planet, it seems. So they should probably be split into individual articles once approved.
*Thanks for the advice. Will do. It's not finished yet, still in progress, which is why some is short and some long. when it's done it will all be long....
Exclamation Important: Try and keep your timeline straight. You context keeps jumping from before to after the "unification league." If they haven't even been invaded and united yet, such a league wouldn't exist, right? Please don't write SARP history before it happens. Not only is it bad roleplay practice, but all the jumping back and forth in time makes your article much more confusing when one tries to read it.
*The unification league is before they become "known" after Asmodeus crashes his ass on the planet and takes over. After the league is after the start of the league, not the end of the league. Just like a history class will probably go up to less then twenty years ago, I'm trying to get as close to the now as possible
Your article claims they're supposed to be a technologically inferior, yet they have achieved digital sentience, have 40-foot tall robots, and mecha that can "use with it's pilot's consciousness so that the pilot is the only person that can pilot it, but it grants them effectively +2 skill."
*Blink* It's not exactly digital sentience. And Ally, last I checked, was an AI. Rather what it is is human minds running off of chips. As for the +2 skill that needs to be removed *blushes* parts of this were originally written up for another source. (begins removal... realizes which computer he is using. Cusses because this computer can't touch wikies)
You have more written on cities and planets than you do the culture and history of the races itself. Not even the Yamatai's homeworld article has many places listed.
*Ummm. I thought that that would be fun, give it a sence of reality. It's not one planet spanning city, but a lot of smaller ones.
Might just be coincidence, but the Diggers seem to have a parallel history and development to the Freespacers. Much too similar for comfort, but I may be biased because I created them. I'll let others decide on this one.
*Coincidence, I swear. Anyways there are similer similarities between Abe Lincoln and JFK. Hell Yamatians and Neps are similerly similer. As for how the diggers maintain it without corruption, well A. it's semi-socialistic, large manufacturies are goverment, small stuff is not. B. there was no violent rebellion of the working class. C. CPUs have a hard time lieing. D. they, like computers, can have their memories read by others.
Anyways I'll get to work on it, but technical difficulties have been screwing with my usage of this computer. I will make everything in the write up clearer, and include the answers to your questions. Thanks for your help