Approved Submission [neshaten] Kur'ken Booster Craft

[Kyle]

Submission Type: Vehicle
Submission URL: Kur'ken Booster Craft
Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes, me!
Faction requires art? Nay
For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? A few
Contains New art? Yes
Previously Submitted? Nay
Notes:

Please read the article before commenting on its speed! There is a very good reason for its speed and obvious drawbacks and limits.

List of unapproved articles:

Large Engineering Bay

Crew Quarters Module

Cafeteria and Lounge Module

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=neshaten:component:hinsen_integrity_system

Atmospheric Control Systems

Airlock

 

[Wes]

This is not a review but just a style comment: Please don't use forced line breaks in wiki articles unless absolutely necessary for positioning (e.g. in tables, etc). Use bullet points instead if you want to list off links or items (ordered lists are preferred over unordered lists).

 

[Kyle]

Forced linebreaks? Can you point a few out for me please Wes so I can understand wha'cha mean (might be notepad++ since I write all of my submissions in that)

 

[Wes]

Forced linebreaks? Can you point a few out for me please Wes so I can understand wha'cha mean (might be notepad++ since I write all of my submissions in that)

=== Hallways and Conduits ===

[[neshaten:components:standard_neshaten_hallways]] \\
[[neshaten:components:maintenance_conduit]] \\

The double backslashes force a line break without making a new paragraph.

 

[Kyle]

Ah those, I've always used them as I noticed them in other articles. Actually, I thought they were needed regardless ;_;

And if I don't use them, the links end up on the same line

 

[Wes]

Use a list:

  - [[item 1]]
  - [[item 2]]

 

[Nashoba]

Review in process

 

[Aendri]

I know I've asked before, but why aren't we supposed to use line breaks? Stylistically speaking, there are some places where I think it looks better than setting a list, but this is mainly curiosity.

 

[Wes]

I know I've asked before, but why aren't we supposed to use line breaks? Stylistically speaking, there are some places where I think it looks better than setting a list, but this is mainly curiosity.

It's considered bad form to use breaks instead of paragraphs, and this is part of the DokuWiki style guide and the guides of most wikis, including Star Army. This has to do with the way web pages are displayed in varying widths. It's important for the site's image to keep a common look to our wiki pages and that's why it's in Star Army's style rules. What the page has is lists of ship components...so they should be in an actual list (bullet points or a numbered list, with numbers being preferred).

 

[Nashoba]

Okay, here is my list of concerns:

1. With regards to the internal compartments, shouldn't there be two of some of them for when the unit is split into two. At least the essential ones like bridge, computer, engineering etc.
2. With regards to the Crew Quarters Module, please specify if there is only one Officer's Quarter, and Counselor's.
   
3. Computers and sensor systems are not specified.
4. Shouldn't there be at least one airlock on each half.

 

[Kyle]

Made those changes, also added an airlock to the list of unapproved submissions in the main OP

 

[Nashoba]

My Concerns have been addressed. APPROVED.