This review is for: [Lazarus/LSDF] LA/AN063 G-Series Attenuated Aetheric powerplant
The submitted article is/has…
[X] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ ] In the proper format/template
[ ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ] Obtusely redundant
[ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ] Lacking Detail
[ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
**Overly complex and technical, this needs to be toned down.
**A range needs to be set for this items sensors.
Status: On hold
Notes
1. The complexity of this article makes it hard for most people to understand, and while such technical details make the article very professional and detailed, it isn't required as articles must be easily understood by tech moderators and also the board as a whole. This needs to be toned down a bit so that tech moderators can more easily understand just what it is this reactor really does and how it functions, but also so that future members who see this article - and who do not possess a technical mind - can also understand it as well.
2. The reactor possess a type of sensors that can detect 'any' aetheric signature in the cluster, this presents problems where-as people can use said reactor to detect these active signatures. This sensor needs to have a range to it.
I intend to finish this review by: Finished