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Approved Submission Lazarus Type 1 Construct Chassis

OsakanOne

OsakanOne

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Submission Type: Hardware
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=lazarus:rosa_body

Faction: Lazarus Consortium
FM Approved Yet? n/a
Faction requires art? no

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? no
Previously Submitted? Yes, the original software

Notes:
This is a further cementing of the rules of the hardware which is used with it (https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=lazarus:rosa, https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:aiesu_kalopsia:constructs)
 
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Is Yarvex a restricted material, @Wes? Doesn't appear to be ...

When you talk about covers inside the abdomen for when fleshy parts are damaged, can you describe them a little more and how they work? Specifically, whether they just paste over an abscess or cover something via some other mechanism.

In "Wireless Interface," the description is repeated.

The way you make this sound, this chassis can run either as an organic bio-construct or as a metallic one — am I reading that right? The mention of bio-constructs confuses me. The bio-construct lacks the bells and whistles of the metallic one, or is there only a metallic version? If it comes only in metallic, why mention bio-constructs?

This sounds like an assassin's weapon. Does Lazarus have any concerns about that? Or any way to address it?
 
One's an organic body with a ROM construct written out onto a purely organic brain, one has a synthetic skeleton, synthetic brain but has all the nice fleshy bits to look like a person.
 
Is the Type 1 Construct Chassis the synthetic model? If so, do you need to mention the bio-construct?

Assuming you're going to answer the other questions.
 
I think I've addressed most of it, including that the ROM construct is physically weaker than most cyborgs in most cases.

The only advantage it has in strength is jaws-of-life like slow crushing motions which would severely damage the organic covers anyway.
 
This review is for: "Rosa" body

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[/] A general topic sentence under the title header
[-] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[x] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[-] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[-] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[-] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Status: This submission is approved for IC usage.

I've marked you for formatting here, but I'm going to fix it so you don't have to (i.e. to avoid being unloaded upon).
 
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Is Yarvex a restricted material, @Wes? Doesn't appear to be ...
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Yes. Only KFY makes it and nobody uses it but the Star Army of Yamatai, as far as I've seen. Not even Yamatai's civilian ships get it.
 
@OsakanOne, you'll need to update this submission accordingly.

@Wes, I found the restriction on the material itself after doing a third check -- but we already have approved Lazarus products that use Yarvex. What's your suggestion moving forward? Considering Yamatai's not a big fan of Lazarus anyway ...
 
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I've edited the Yarvex page to say so in a much more obvious matter to prevent future confusion.
 
Did I just miss it before? I thought I checked the material page ...

Do we just let the submissions stand as they are, as they're already approved?
 
As Faction Manager, I have the right to control use of my faction's unique technology, and I am invoking that FM right.
 
(Just a bit of forewarning, she's probably going to lose her shit at this considering the sort of retroactive change that you're asking of her)
 
Its removed. Also, @Wes get something on the wiki so we know its proprietary. Your users need to know this stuff. Indicate this stuff clearly.
 
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