Approved Submission [Ken-TEC] Warlock Mk 1 Powered Armor

[Legix]

Submission Type: Power Armor
Template Used: Power Armor
Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:corp:kentec:warlock
Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:kentec:warlock

Faction: Independent
FM Approved Yet? There's no FMs where we're going. (But we can tag @Gunhand4171 or @Ametheliana since I guess we're technically in Nepleslia?)
Faction requires art? Yes, as I'm certain Power Armor requires it.

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? Yes
Previously Submitted? No

Notes: Only one. (Plus, I guess I should link the series of RPing that led up to the Warlock being made that happened in stories + a JP? Here it is. I don't think it really matters much, but it should help show that this wasn't just some "leap to sudden creation" for once in my book of things.)

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[META_mahn]

I'd like to kamehameha Eldrich Blast the enemy Reaper, please.
This review is for: Warlock Mk1

The submitted article is/has…
[ Y ] A very high level of overall quality

• It has a drawbacks section. Not even Mindys have a drawback section.

[ Y ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ Y ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)

I'm not sure what this is, please explain :kappa:
[ Y ] Needed and/or useful to the setting

• Civilian PA. Expands on lore. Therefore good.

[ Y ] In the proper format/template
[ Y ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ Y ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)

• SO MUCH LORE

[ Y ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ Y ] No red and/or broken links
[ Y ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ Y ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ N ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)

• Unless this is Aldnoah Zero, you're not gonna see someone kill a guy with this. Probably.

[ N ] Obtusely redundant
[ N ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ N ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation

• ame did the thing

[ N ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ N ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ N ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ N ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ N ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ N ] Lacking Detail

• lore text

[ N ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ Y ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ Y ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ Y ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ Y ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

Summary
See red stuff

Status: Approved

Notes
See red stuff

I intend to finish this review by: 12/22/2017

 

[Ametheliana]

@Gunhand4171 and I both give our permission for the IC usage of this equipment.

 

[META_mahn]

Editing post.

 

[Legix]

Editing post.

My wizarding skills were never in doubt.

Nomenclature is added to title.

Now accept your destiny. You're a Warlock, Jerry.

 

[META_mahn]

 

[Ametheliana]

Approved