Thanks for the wait Arbs. Here are some of my pre-checklist thoughts.
"The larger variant is approximately as durable as the standard Ke-M2 "Mindy" Series of Power Armor, approximately the same durability (Tier 4). While it is not fully protected by its barrier, said barrier is equivalent in power.
The smaller LWE is similar, however its smaller size and consequentially reduced amount of armor compare it to a heavy, non-powered armor15). Its built-in shield is similar in strength."
15) links to DRv3 Tier 3 and I think it should instead be listed as DR was listed above with (Tier 3) in parentheses like above. Go one step further and list that tier's such as Heavy Anti-Personnel or Light Anti-Armor and it would be even better.
"These cheap and deployable turrets were originally designed as a personal project using mostly spare Mindy components and modules strapped together, but after initial simulated testing proved to be somewhat successful a design was sent to Ketsurui Fleet Yards for refinement by proper engineers, as well as further testing, and mass production for the SAoY."
This is a run on and incomplete sentence. How you said "...but after initial.." means you need to follow up with something about what it ended up doing. I think if you re-worded the sentence like this (doesn't have to be this:
"These cheap and deployable turrets were originally designed as a personal project using mostly spare Mindy components and modules strapped together. After initial simulated testing proved to be somewhat successful a design was sent to Ketsurui Fleet Yards for refinement by proper engineers, as well as further testing, and then began mass production for the SAoY."
Biggest changes are that I added, "and then began" as well as chopped up a sentence and took out one word, "and" but anyway...
I think you shouldn't link the AIES as an "electronics package" but instead as "AIES". We should all know what AIES is.
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Here's some fixes this article still needs:
The spelling and grammar is just for the stuff above btw
The page title should be like how the Mindy 4's page is set up. The nomenclature of the title should should be changed to match what the URL is.
It's not in the weapons template?
Are the biggest versions "bigger than human-sized"?
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