On Hold [Non-Approvable] Light Weapon Emplacements

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-Fixed the big run-on sentence.
-Tweaked the DR flufftext and the mention of AIES (though, to be fair, there's a link that takes a person right to the AIES page.)
-Changed the title.
-I wasn't sure what template to really use - though... I don't think it would be in the weapons template, though? The turret uses existing weapons, but isn't necessarily a weapon in itself in the conventional sense.
-The turrets have dimensions already listed, in bolth System International and Impearial scales. Pretty much the only people they'd be bigger/taller than are about half of my characters (ironically, even Arria herself - who made them), and any chibi-neko.
-"I can't find a place w" I'm... Not sure what this means, Ame - I think that a bit of your last sentence was eaten by the forum?
 

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Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

[ ✔️ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.
[ ✔️ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.
[ ✔️ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✔️ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.
[ ✔️ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.
[ ✔️ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ N/A ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).
[ ✔️ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✔️ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ❌ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Here are some fixes this article still needs:
  1. @Wes, the Faction Manager of the Yamatai Star Empire, needs to post his approval of the submission in this thread.
Status: Pending

Note: This review does not include the Ke-M2-W4000 Light Weapon Emplacement Carrier Module.
 
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Thanks, Frost!

For the record, though: FM approval isn't needed right now since this won't be used in canon yet - when the time comes for me to make this actually canon, then we can concern ourselves with that.

Additionally, the carrier module, if I recall how things are handled usually, would be a subarticle here? I don't know how subarticles are handled with the updated review system, but I recall them being mentioned in the old review system. (If necessary, I can make a separate submission thread for that when the time comes.)
 
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Acknowledged, @Arbitrated; therefore...

Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

[ ✔️ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.
[ ✔️ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.
[ ✔️ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✔️ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.
[ ✔️ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.
[ ✔️ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ N/A ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).
[ ✔️ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✔️ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ❌ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Here are some fixes this article still needs:
  1. Ordinarily, Wes - the Faction Manager of the Yamatai Star Empire - would need to post his approval of the submission in this thread; since the submitter does not want for it to be used in canon yet, however, I'm going to mark it as "On Hold" for now.
Status: On Hold

Note: Unlike the previous review, this review does include the Ke-M2-W4000 Light Weapon Emplacement Carrier Module.
 
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The page doesn't fit the template Frost y u lie (JK, love ya platonically, duder, just like how I love 90% of SARPers), since y'know - the new template just got approved. Gimme a day or three to change things around and make them work and all that schtuff ^^
 
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