This review is for: Vekimen Defensive Task Force with URL:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:vekimen_defensive_task_force:military
The submitted article is/has…
[ ^ ω ^] A very high level of overall quality
[ ^ ω ^] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ^ ω ^] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[ ^ ω ^] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ToC is disrupted] In the proper format/template
[See notes] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[^ ω ^] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[Not quite there] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[^ ω ^] No red and/or broken links
[^ ω ^] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[^ ω ^] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[^ ω ^] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[^ ω ^] Obtusely redundant
[^ ω ^] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[^ ω ^] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[^ ω ^] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[^ ω ^] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[^ ω ^] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[^ ω ^] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[^ ω ^] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[^ ω ^] Lacking Detail
[^ ω ^] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[See Notes] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[N/A] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
I intend to finish this review by: 10/10/17 (or later if you're not done!)
Notes:
Can you try to make a pre YE date of creation? It's really hard to find in the footnotes when it was created in a year format everyone on the site can digest.
Grammar and spelling: (You put ad where and should be, it's instead of its, Vekimens instead of Vekimen's, etc. There are random capitals throughout the article. If something does not start the sent. or is not a proper noun, it prob doesn't need a capitalization. You put /all/ instead of //all//.)
The right wrap infobox needs to be inserted lower, probably after a few paragraphs, to accommodate the ToC. I know ToC cause problems a lot, but this will help.
This refers to Alliance of the Black Sun a lot. Is this a vestigal saying from when the BS was still being formed? Does it need to change to Asteria, now? Or is the alliance going to continue in some different form?
Is there any part of the VDTF that deals with "feral" Vekimen?
I have come to understand the Vekimen enter the VDTF as children from birth in order to not become feral, right? Is there anything about training programs you could say?