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Approved Character Abeni Van Laar

A Helashio, huh? I'll get on the horn to DocTomoe for you.

I'm not one to judge, but this character seems an odd one to join the military, have you considered changing her background/personality slightly, or perhaps going independant?

Anyway, hopefully a character mod will write up here soon, and you can competely dismiss my opinion. ;)

EDIT: So it turns out I've made a fool of myself yet again, Docs already explained to me and right now I'm feeling quite miffed. Ah well. Looking forward to seeing you 'round, new blood.
 
The skills are very lacking, even if the history seems to back them up. If she has Military training then she needs at least a boilerplate text for her skills; If the Lorath CCG lacks that, then try to use examples from other races.

Once the Skills are fleshed out, I'll approve her.
 
kai said:
The skills are very lacking, even if the history seems to back them up. If she has Military training then she needs at least a boilerplate text for her skills; If the Lorath CCG lacks that, then try to use examples from other races.

Once the Skills are fleshed out, I'll approve her.
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Helashio don't have a CCG, and Lorath CCG has caste related skill-sets. Military training sets are arbitrary and are related to the individual and their personal qualifications.
 
I added some fluff text to the skills description. I'm trying to refrain from making her ultra-skilled because really she's just a grunt, so I'm trying to give her a skill set that a grunt would have. Honestly, if it were up to me, I wouldn't have given her anything besides "shooting" "fighting" "survival" and "driving". It sounds silly to say that something could seem "unrealistic" when talking about a character on SA, but the skills beyond the aforementioned 4 basic ones start sounding "unrealistic" to me, just because I don't see a grunt knowing much about explosives or mass communications.. generally armed forces have specialists for those sort of things assigned to each squad.

That being said, I understand the necessity of such skills in order to make her usable in a storyline, so I'll comply instead of complain.

I'd love to hear any sort of criticisms; I feel I have a clear and logical explanation for any potential paradoxes or confusions, but I realize I may have not properly explained them in the character description.
 
Well, the additions to the skills have satisfied me, even if they are still short, they are very concise, a trait which I like.

I have no real qualms with the character itself, as it follows what I understand of Helashio, as well as having Tomoe's recommendation

so, Approved

Now let's see if I can figure out how to move this thread....
 
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