You need to go through the entire for grammar, punctualtion and spelling errors.
Examples
Caucasian, athletical body build, fair skin. Her skinny body also doesnt make her very attractive.
athletical should most likely be athletic
doesnt should be doesn't
Alice had always knacked for training. Should be Alice always had a knack for training.
proper girl unlickyly had
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