Approved Character Amit

[Readlliea]

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:amit#physical_description
@Ace @Zack

 

[Zack]

I'm ok with this. Run away super science doesn't need much more explanation here than Nanomachines (son).

You should remove the mutant link in the species type and just make it normal text since there isn't a wiki page for mutant. It also may be better to say human mutant rather than just mutant.

 

[Readlliea]

I didn't really explain any nanomachines with Lawrence, just that Kissan drug thing. So...what needs explaining with nanomachines?

Edits made.

 

[Zack]

No explaining needed here I think.

This stuff can be done in the setting, nanomachines probably have some hand in it, no need to go further than what is already on the page.

I'm willing to approve this.

 

[Readlliea]

Done in setting?

 

[Zack]

Body changing technology is all around from that drug to various medical submissions is why I mean.

 

[Readlliea]

I'm still a little confused but okay.

 

[FrostJaeger]

No explaining needed here I think.

This stuff can be done in the setting, nanomachines probably have some hand in it, no need to go further than what is already on the page.

I'm willing to approve this.

How can you approve a setting element when you are not an NTSE moderator, @Zack?

@Readlliea - Which/what product(s) of
Pyschopomp LLC were utilized in Amit's transformation?

 

[Ira]

Faction managers approve characters.

 

[Readlliea]

Ace didn't really say anything for products when I ran the idea by them. So in all honesty, I don't know if any of their own products would be in him or not. The collar might be theirs but...again, I had no ideas on how to explain the collar. So...maybe that?

 

[Ametheliana]

I think some things got confused. This is for the 188604 plot. Zack as a GM needed to approve of this, not as an FM. Ace as the head of the corp with the genetic manipulation products may need to verify it's fine to use them, but they're civilian merchandise so I don't really think Ace needs to approve. Would be nice to have his ideas here, though!

Just on a cursory look to get that info, it looked like the box under the pic needs some sprucing up. The organization and YE of birth need to be linked and included.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Faction managers approve characters.

False, @Ira - Game Masters approve characters, while it's merely encouraged to also get the approval of the relevant Faction Manager(s) - nor was I referring to Amit; rather, I was referring to the "stuff" @Zack mentioned in his post.

 

[Ace]

Seems fine to me other than what Zack had to say. my internet is acting up so excuse me if i missed something

 

[Ametheliana]

Thanks Ace. Good to see you!

 

[Readlliea]

I do have his YE, since he's only 10, he was born in the year YE 29. Unless years have changed since I've last was able to notice. For Orginization, I wasn't sure on what to put.

I did make the edits Zack suggested.

 

[FrostJaeger]

One minor thing: is the part about the "Star Army Standard Issue Items" supposed to be in the Inventory & Finance section?

 

[Ira]

I'm not sure that Zack needed the help Frost.

 

[Readlliea]

I didn't edit that section much so, it's usually there whenever I do a app. I'll delete that

 

[Zack]

Readlliea, since you have the approval of everyone you need, you can consider this character officially

Approved

 

[FrostJaeger]

I'm not sure that Zack needed the help Frost.

I wasn't trying to help @Zack, @Ira - I was trying to help @Readlliea, as this thread is for their character, not Zack's.