Cy83r K0rp53
Inactive Member
Fay said:First off, welcome to SARP.
Second, nice picture... but SARP can't use copyrighted pictures for anything. Unless you drew that picture (or have the copyright license for it), then you'll have to remove it. The picture doesn't match the description exactly, too, btw.
Third, and now, the character:
1. 23 years old and 'fresh out of the vat'? Dermal pigments?A little special for just a clone, eh?
2. Description and explanations on physical features are unnecessary in the Personality section. Those go in the Distinguising Features section.
3. His Creator would be "Star Military of the Democratic Imperium of Nepleslia" probably.
4. Pre-RP should be what happened at his birth, during training, and anything else that happened before he comes aboard the NSS Acadia.
5. Just glanced at the Skills, but they seem to be in order. I'll let others fine tune it.
6. Great start, but he seems a little sparse right now. Good luck!
Personality: Anselm is aggressively antagonistic, a trait that has won him few friends and several reprimands and punishments over the course of his training. His choice of friends is unpredictable and a bad omen since anyone he seems to give an ounce of respect to suffers a bizarre accident, so far one person has suffered “Anselm's Omen”, as his classmates have named the coincidence.
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