I can only assume what Wes meant, I have the time, and it can't hurt to do a checklist, even if he wants to do one, as well. Wes, let me know if I've made an egregious error in doing this and I won't jump the gun next time.
This review is for:
Broadsword Light Cruiser with URL:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:uso:broadsword_light_cruiser
The submitted article is/hasβ¦
[β’] A very high level of overall quality
[β’] A general topic sentence under the title header
[β’] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[β’] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[β’] In the proper format/template
[See below] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[β’] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[β’] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[β’] No red and/or broken links
[β’] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[β’] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does notβ¦
[β’] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[β’] Obtusely redundant
[β’] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[β’] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[β’] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[β’] Use second-person language (βyouβ or βyourβ) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[β’] Use bombastic language (βvirtually immune,β βnearly indestructible,β βinsanely powerful,β βhorrible effectsβ)
[See below] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[β’] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[β’] Lacking Detail
[β’] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article hasβ¦
[β’] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[See below] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[β’] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[See Below] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
To the submitter: Is this a refit or overhaul of a previous article? If yes, provide a link and a list of changes.
I intend to finish this review by: 2/19/17 (Today)
Notes:
Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners): You have some headers with no text below them. Ex: Inside the Ship and Ship Systems. Compartments are all one liners, but that isn't as bothersome as the history and background one liner.
Proofread for spelling and grammar: "The Broadsword has nodes located throughout the hull project a conformal set of shields all across the ship. By depowering some of these nodes shields can be lowered in a certain area to allow EVA or fighter craft to exit a hangar." Write
that between
hull and
project. Add a comma between
shields and
can.
Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines: On weapons, write T11 instead of 11, etc
I have reviewed this submission in accordance with the Guide for Submission Reviewers.