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On Hold Celestial Aisles, the Mining guild's first Mobile Store

Charaa

Charaa

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Submission WIP URL
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:starship:mobile_store#ooc_notes
Submission RP Example
https://stararmy.com/roleplay-forum/threads/in-the-business-of-the-mining-guild.70913/page-5#post-449616
Submission URL
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=starship:mobile_store#ooc_notes
Submission Template URL
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=templates:starship
List Any Unapproved Sub-Articles

Echosails on Star Army Space Roleplay

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Submission Faction(s)
  1. Outlaws (Independent)
Submission Terms
  1. I agree
The Celestial Aisles was a idea i had, about the mining guild using a Polaris-class Ultra Carrier, as a mobile store. I asked GPT if it was possible and turns out it was. In addition because i wanted to make the store part as the real focus, the other parts like the systems, bridge, and crew area were simply linked from the original page. Because of that, i decided to submit the page, along with its sub article the Advertisement drones, Echosails. I was originally thinking to just submit the drones, before this new decision. Lastly, i used the starship namespace rather than Corp:mining_guild:starships namespace because i wanted to use the feature where I can show it on the map.

Lastly, this is technically the beginning of my location focus. But I think I should take a break, so Wes or the NTSE can catch up, sorry about this!
 
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Charaa,

I am going to give you a chance to go over the other reviews for your submissions, cause once again the same errors echo through this entire section of submissions so I don't have to tell you to fix the same type of errors! Let me know when you've revised the article accordingly.

Thank you!
 
alright... I've attempted to go over both the Mobile store and the drones i've submitted in the sub article list, to get rid of mentions of cutting edge and state of the art mentions, then i made sure to link things where possible, if it wasn't mentioned already.

I dont think i missed anything. but knowing my eyes its possible no matter how much i look.
 

On this submission​


  • [ ❌] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
    • name of page should be wip:corp:mining_guild:merchant_class_starship
  • [ ❌] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and the article template. Is all the information for struct present?
    • Article has incorrectly nested sections.
    • The echosails page needs a history section and should follow the template.
    • Some missed opportunities for linking key words into the wiki to make the article more integrated.
  • [✅] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
  • [✅] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
  • [ ✅ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
  • [ ✅ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
  • [ ✅ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and credited in the OOC section.
  • [ ✅ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
  • [ ✅ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
  • ✅ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Some Good things about the article​

  • I like the art
  • This reminds me of the old ecstasy-class ships used by the SAOY a long time ago.
  • Informative.
 
The ship namespace was so that it could show up, on the map whenever i needed it to, but i can easily make a new starship Celestial Aisles page for that purpose. I also corrected the nested issue, it was mainly the features heading, i had noticed being a little too far in the table of contents on the side. i've added some extra links, to the pages, and moved the speed heading in the Echosails to bold instead so that the History can be more visible and up a little. I've also changed to price to the ones shown in your post and changed the ship nomenclature.
 
Charaa said:
The ship namespace was so that it could show up, on the map whenever i needed it to, but i can easily make a new starship Celestial Aisles page for that purpose. I also corrected the nested issue, it was mainly the features heading, i had noticed being a little too far in the table of contents on the side. i've added some extra links, to the pages, and moved the speed heading in the Echosails to bold instead so that the History can be more visible and up a little. I've also changed to price to the ones shown in your post and changed the ship nomenclature.
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  • Alright on the namespace thing, I figured this was a "class" of ship that the Mining Guild would manufacture.
  • This has to remain on hold until @Wes makes a determination on the whole Aether topic in your Intelligence article.
 
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