Approved Submission DR1 motorcycle, or the "Desert Rider"

[Jack Pine]

Submission Type: Ground Vehicle
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:uso:skyguard:dr1
UPDATED LINK: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:uso:skyguard:dr1

Faction: USO
FM Approved Yet? (No)
Faction requires art? (No)

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (No)
Contains New art? (Yes)
Previously Submitted? (No)

Notes: took a lot of edits and some help from Legix, but finally got the wiki done.

 

[Jack Pine]

@Zack @Ametheliana , just tagging you guys so you can review my newest submission.

 

[Ametheliana]

Sweet deal

 

[Ametheliana]

Just tagging @Zack again

 

[Zack]

FM approval

 

[Ametheliana]

Not a complete sentence: "With his recent familiarization of the tech in the U1 and his new access to information on hand at Section 6, though a more family friendly hobby would be nice."

Its not it's once in the article.

Price?

So far so good.

 

[Jack Pine]

Made the first two corrections, but confused on the price question. There is a price listed, is there something wrong with that price? @Ametheliana

 

[Ametheliana]

I must have overlooked it.

3 Day Approval Timer

 

[Jack Pine]

Who's approval is left that is needed?

 

[Ametheliana]

Nobody's. I have already given approval and now we wait to make sure nobody has any issues with it.

 

[Ametheliana]

This review is for: Desert Rider with URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:uso:skyguard:dr1

The submitted article is/has…
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] A very high level of overall quality
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] In the proper format/template
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] No red and/or broken links
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Obtusely redundant
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Lacking Detail
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[٩(◕‿◕)۶ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
To the submitter: Is this a refit or overhaul of a previous article? If yes, provide a link and a list of changes.

Approved