I'm at your service.
To the review:
First and foremost, I think you have a ways to go to reducing the wordsoup. This article is more clearly written, but you backtrack early on to explain RL technology and terminology. I don't believe you can help that, however; without it, I would have been far more lost.
I'm going to limit my critique of the submission's context. What's important for the player is how the stuff is used now and how they might use it themselves. The science behind it is nebulous, but the effect is clear — we have here the means to utilize Souricans and make them into applicable computer sources.
It might be more helpful to the player to explain how they will see this technology in the setting. If I'm a Lorath technician, for instance, am I going to see EQFM tech in frames? What tools do I bring to work on it? If I'm an experienced captain, how does it change how I interact with my AI, if at all? Does it feel more "dead" than the farmed brains of Sourcians? Does it feel at all? What about someone wanting to buy the technology, if they could?
You're close at this point. This feels more like background tech to justify later submissions, but if at all possible, we should avoid past mistakes (not directly yours) and offer useful player context.
This in-development submission remains in good standing.