Approved Character [HAS Reva Maya] Maliq Al'Kuyun

[Perilous Siege]

All right so, Dumont ended up convincing me to join the plot and I wrote up a char.

Mind taking a look @Legix and @Ametheliana ?

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:maliq_al_kuyun

 

[Ametheliana]

1) Why would his horns be white ivory? They're brownish orange by nature. Somatic tuning could make them white, though.

2) Run the history through a spell checker. Judgment in the personality should be spelled judgement.

3) You almost linked Desert Wind, but not quite. Add the brackets.

4) Is he a barista or waiter? Two very different things. (For instance, I have been a barista before a lot a lot, but never have I been a waiter. They're just very different.)

 

[Perilous Siege]

1. Fixed, made it made it a brownish orange

2. All right, that any better?

3. Fixed, should be properly linked

4. Fixed, should just be waiter now

 

[Ametheliana]

This looks good on my end. I noticed you made some formatting changes I was going to let go but that's cool that you did (like inventory)!

 

[Legix]

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